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 Where's the Dang Key?  [E]
A homeowner keeps losing his house key.
by Dan I Am
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Exclaim* Hi Dan! Oh we never got to hear what happened to the keys! I was hoping for a punch line or an explanation, but I guess that's part of what makes this story a mystery. Your readers will just have to use their imagination and guess what might be happening!

I liked the light humor in your story, and I see that's why you added comedy to the genres listed. Your character kept his sense of humor, even though he was obviously stressed out from his bad luck with keys. He had been losing them out of his pocket, then they didn't work anytime he hid one to use. His solution of selling anything of value and simply keeping the doors unlocked was funny. I imagined a door accidentally locking anyway, and he still wouldn't be able to get in. LOL

I thought you had a fun start to your story. The narrator tells us that he had to break into his house again for the third time this year! Oh no! Nobody should have to do that. I was thrilled to read more because I kept hoping to find out what was happening, especially after reading the next part!

Oh my gosh, the narrator starts feeling paranoid because he came up with the far-fetched idea that someone is taking his hidden keys, filing the teeth of them down, and then putting them back. Like a prank! I would have thought maybe a rat was gnawing at them, but now you have your readers wondering, too! That's the sign of a fun, thought-provoking story.

I think it's time that character gets himself an electronic door lock. Then, there will never be anything to lose, unless he forgets his code!
Nice work. It was a fun read. *Delight*


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