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 The Jump  [E]
A tale of a leap of faith....Writing prompt. Had to use the bold words
by Temperance Stone
Review of The Jump  
Review by Jayne
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Temperance Stone!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
"The Jump" is an evocative narrative that captures the essence of confronting and overcoming one's deepest fears. It's a genuinely universal experience portrayed through a potent metaphor of a literal leap.

*Checkb*Title and Description:
The title encapsulates the central theme of "a leap of faith." The description "leap of faith" hints at the story's physical and symbolic dimensions, setting up an expectation of discovery.

*Checkb*Hook and plot:
The story opens in media res, with the protagonist poised on the brink of an intimidating challenge, hooking the reader with a sense of urgency. As the story progresses, it builds tension through a series of reflective and introspective moments, followed by the cathartic release as the protagonist finally makes the jump. The plot maintains a great pace, ensuring that the reader is emotionally invested throughout.

*Checkb*Characters and dialogue:
The protagonists are presented with a depth of vulnerability and resilience, making them relatable and inspiring. The dialogue, focused on encouragement and internal monologues, effectively reveals the protagonists' fluctuating emotions and, ultimately, their courage.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
Using the first-person narrative enhances the immediacy and intimacy of the experience. You don't need the explanation at the end; the story gets the message across without it.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
The story beautifully parallels significant life experiences and highlights the universality of fear of the unknown and the exhilaration of overcoming it. Its philosophical depth makes it a memorable and inspiring read. It encourages all readers to embrace the beauty that awaits on the other side of fear.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Jayne *Smile*



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