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My Mother the Star  [ASR]
A mother and daughter in the roaring 20's
by Maryann
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Free Folk  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hello Maryann

I'm sending this review in connection with "Game of Thrones.


*Penw* Positives

Your story beautifully captures the nostalgic glamour of the roaring 20s through the eyes of a child whose mother is a silent film star. The narrative is rich with vivid descriptions of the era, from the fashion of Gabrielle Chanel to the sensation of driving a Ford Model T. The protagonist’s perspective brings a fresh, innocent viewpoint to the glamorous yet challenging life of growing up in the spotlight. The blend of historical details with the personal experiences of the narrator creates a compelling and engaging story that celebrates the uniqueness of the time period. The inclusion of cultural icons and new technologies of the era, like frozen foods and silent films, adds authenticity and depth to the storytelling.


*Penw* Suggestions

While the story is charming and well-paced, there could be an opportunity to deepen the emotional impact by exploring more complex interactions between the protagonist and their mother. This could include more scenes that showcase the mother’s influence on her child beyond public appearances and shopping trips, perhaps highlighting moments of personal struggle or triumph that emphasize her role as a mother, not just a celebrity. Additionally, the conflict with the science teacher offers a promising subplot that could be developed further to enhance the narrative tension and provide a fuller resolution to the story.


*Penw* Overall

This tale is a delightful journey into the 1920s, seen through the eyes of someone who both idolizes and is deeply affected by their mother’s fame. It effectively mixes historical ambiance with personal storytelling, making the reader feel both the excitement and the pressures of celebrity life. With a bit of expansion on the emotional and conflict-driven elements of the story, it could offer a more rounded and powerful exploration of the characters’ lives and relationships.


Respectfully,

Jeff
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