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 You Did That On Purpose  [E]
Just try to get my wife to leave on time.
by JACE
Rated: E | (4.5)
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"Game of Thrones Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.
Title: You Did That On Purpose
First Impression: Is it any wonder many couples require or should investigate counselling? They certainly know which buttons to push. They are able to bewitch and bother each other with ease. The actual, exact, precise time is not important. The honey-do list is revealed in a series of consecutive questions that serve to delay their departure. Has one of them scored points and secured them upon an unseen scoreboard for future gloating? Ten minutes early, or whenever.
What needs your attention: Nothing. I did not notice any glaring spelling errors, or awkward sentence structure.
What I liked best: This dialogue, this scenario is lifelike and believable. Married couples can and do nag, nit pick, and tease. What does a mere ten minutes signify? Why can't they depart "ten minutes early"? Why does one ask all the needless questions to delay their departure? What does any of this matter in the grand scheme of things? Petty, irritating things like this occur. One partner has already been nagged to forsake television viewing. Is one of the pair laidback and the other an attention-to-detail fretter? One query proffered and a single word answer as a reply. One 'yes' after another. Who is eager to go now? Who is impatient? This is communication at its finest. The humour of the absolutely unnecessary delay made me chuckle. The lines could be spoken by either partner and it would still be funny.
Overall Impression: This is a hilarious slice of married life. I appreciate the laughs. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure. What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.
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