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 A Last few Words From An Army-man  [E]
Every life should be dedicated to the self-nation.
by Ashok Banerjee
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hey Ashok Banerjee, Sorry I didn't get around to your piece yesterday. This is a powerful writing. Freestyle works well for this writing.

Dying for your country is a noble thing. But I prefer you fight and live! My grandson graduated from Army BootCamp and was home for two weeks before he went to Washington. He was in a car wreck on Christmas Morning 2022, he was thrown from the car. He died a week later, never coming out of his coma. He was wrapped in the American Flag. He also got a donor flag. He would have been proud. He always wanted to join the Army since he was very young.

Your poem is emotional and it comes through your words strongly. I can tell how much you enjoyed being in the service and how proud you are. As you should be.

In the last stanza, you have:

A fortune person

It should be:

A fortunate person

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. And above all, thank you so much for your service! Our country should value all of our service men and women. For it is you who keep us safe from the enemy, where we can go about our everyday lives.

*Heart* Tracey


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