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 The Black Fur Coat   [E]
A short story about transformation as possession, and unleashing the animal in all of us.
by Shika/Noah
Review by Beholden
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of The Black Fur Coat by Shika/Noah

This is an interesting creature. I've never read a story that telegraphs its ending almost immediately upon opening but remains gripping right until the finish. Yet that's exactly what this does. It is quite fascinating how it piles on the clues as the protagonist gets more feline every day. The slow transformation draws one on as if mesmerised, and the final denouement is a masterpiece of intimate description. It's exactly like Bolero, the classical music piece that starts so quietly and repeats its theme again and again while getting louder until its magnificent crescendo at the end.

And that's just the story. Your descriptive powers are quite amazing, too. It is so refreshing to read completely new ways of looking at the world and the metaphors you create are vivid and unusual. Yes, there's a formatting error here and a misspelling there, but these are nothing when compared to the spell you weave. I'm going to offer you some advice in the hope that you'll develop into a hugely powerful writer. First of all, don't get a swollen head at what I'm saying - it's obvious that you're just starting out and have a lot to learn. And then practise, practise, practise - write every day, even if it's just a tiny piece or thought, and keep going. Don't take too much notice of people who say that you have to write in a particular way - don't ruin the gift with too many straitjacket rules. Keep writing from your heart and the practice will develop your technique.

The two errors I mentioned are as follows:

The fourth and fifth paragraphs need to be separated with one more Return.

The past tense of "slink" is "slunk," not "slunked."

And that's it. Both errors are so tiny that they don't affect my rating - it's a five star maximum in my opinion. Finally, one more bit of advice - keep writing!


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