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Game of Thrones 2024: House Mormont  [13+]
My story and poem entries for WDC's 2024 GoT challenge.
by Lady Elizabeth Mormont
         Review for entry/chapter: "Road Less Traveled
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello Lady Elizabeth Mormont! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones.

*Reading* Good story. I see you only have one entry for the Game of Thrones in your folder, but your handle still reads Mormont. Are you still competing? I hope so. You did a really good job on the story with the prompt. I know Game of Thrones can be a little intimidating at first, but it gets easier -- though, you do remain busy, busy, busy! *Laugh* (Which I kind of enjoy) *Wink*

The Title and Description - I'm reviewing "The Road Less Traveled" in your Game of Thrones 2024L House Mormont Folder. "The Road Less Traveled" is the name of the prompt, so it fits the story nicely.

The Storyline/Plot - Two women go on a mission. They must be careful of the blood-lust monsters out in the world now. They seem to be a bit uncomfortable about their mission, and they hope it will be worth leaving the comfort they had with their friends, while they stay safe enough to make it back home.

The Characters - The two women are the main characters. We get to know them a bit through the story. I would have liked them to face a situation where we could have seen how they would have reacted to it. I think that way we could have gotten to know them a bit better.

The Setting - You did have some good details in your story. With just a few more vivid descriptions of their surroundings, it would have helped us envision each scene better as we read.

What I Liked Best - The writing that showed the women's uneasiness. It came through strongly, giving us a sense of the fear they felt of what was hiding in the shadows.

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us!

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"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
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