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 Bitter  [E]
This is a poem about broken relationships.
by eveandthetree
Review of Bitter  
Review by Beacon's Light
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi there, I'm Beacon and I found your Poem at random. I'm with the "The WDC Angel Army" . I enjoyed reading it and I hope you find this feedback useful.


I am the watcher on the walls. I am the shield that
guards the realms of men. I pledge my life and honor to the Night's Watch,
for this night and all the nights to come.



My First impression: I liked this poem because it brings out the emotions and I can almost hear the words from it. I know what it's like to have a broken relationship because I've been in one long time ago and even now. It's never easy to deal with that.


What works: Even though, I liked your poem, it needs to be centered and the font size 4 should be good.



Suggestion: I honestly didn't see any spelling or vocabulary errors in the poem.



Final thoughts: Here's my thoughts, This poem made me think about my own life outside of the computer and I had several broken relationships as I got older. When you are in a broken relationship, it's time to do some soul searching because you have to figure out if the person is a good one or not, it's all up to you. You have given this some thought but I understand what the poem is saying as well. I think you wrote your poem well and I hope you keep on writing. Relationships can be hard, if two people are willing to work out the problems together but if it's one person, now that's hard on the person because if the person loves the other person, then it's hard to leave. Throughout the years, I've been in bad relationships and I didn't know why I stayed with them but I did. I wasn't happy, like I'm not happy now because of my situation. Either way, it's hard to leave when you are in love with the person you have been with for a long time.

I hope you find peace in your heart.
Thank you for sharing your poem,
Beacon




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