Greetings Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm !

I am currently reviewing as part of the tasks set by the "Game of Thrones" . I especially visited your port to dig your most precious gems then this piece appeared. In this review, I mainly focus on the positives of your piece and I may point some Areas for Improvement if found any. Without much a do, here are the things I noticed after delving deeper into the contents:


The poem "Surrender the Soul" plunges the reader into a heart-pounding descent into a terrifying underworld. The strong verbs like "enter," "dwell," "linger," and "awaiting" establish a sense of impending doom from the very first line. The imagery is visceral and unrelenting, with details like "rancid smells," "decomposing flesh," and "monsters drooling" creating a suffocating atmosphere of horror. The personification of the fiends with "hidden faces" snickering adds another layer of unsettling mystery.

The poem builds tension effectively through the protagonist's journey. The lines "knowing your fate beforehand" and the stark contrast between "hold your life" and "sign your fate" highlight the character's internal struggle. However, the abrupt ending leaves the reader hanging, unsure of the character's choice and the potential consequences of surrender. This inconclusiveness is a deliberate strategy, forcing the reader to confront their own ideas of fear, temptation, and the power of free will.

Beyond the immediate horror, the poem offers room for deeper exploration. The title "Surrender the Soul" is potent but could be delved into further. Does it signify literal damnation or a more metaphorical yielding to inner demons? The poem uses strong imagery but could benefit from a touch of emotional depth. Does the character feel paralyzing fear, defiant rage, or perhaps a quiet resignation in the face of the inevitable? Exploring these emotional nuances could elevate the poem from a chilling encounter to a profound exploration of human choice and the battle between good and evil within ourselves.

Overall, "Surrender the Soul" creates a compelling atmosphere of fear and suspense. With some additional development of the theme and the character's emotional landscape, it has the potential to become a truly haunting and thought-provoking piece. Thank you for sharing this. Write on!


Best regards,
Gervic