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 | Last Ditch Effort  [13+] 55 word contest, Round 237  |
| (5.0)   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   Greetings, Sir Various! I am reviewing this because today is your 14th WdC Anniversary!  Congratulations! First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked I assume you are an avid reader. I believe authors learn so much by reading (or listening) to books. Your piece here is so well-written—so solid. And what a great way to hook a reader to want more. I realize this is a contest entry limited to 55 words, but oh, what a great beginning to a book!  I like that you started this piece with missing the Camero and ended it much the same way. Full-circle.  In only 55 words, you've managed to supply the reader with detailed descriptions, showing (vs telling), and action. And still...emotion was evident. That's a lot! Great job! My favorite line (though I enjoyed all of them!): Perched high in the atmosphere, the mother ship's baleful gaze threatened his planet’s survival. Awesome visual. Suggestions/Comments to ConsiderI have absolutely nothing to suggest. Perfect punctuation, grammar, and spelling. Final ThoughtsI hope you are still writing! If you aren't, you should be. You definitely have the gift! Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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