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 Inner Demons  [18+]
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by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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A dark and moody poem that hints mysteriously at the giving up of life, yet leaves it up to us to determine what exactly is the true meaning. I admire the tight structure and the use of repetition of the introductory verse as bookends to begin and end the poem on a properly haunting note, as we end up with an entirely different understanding of what the first verse might mean by the time we see it again.

I would like to suggest using a larger font size for this item, to give it greater “significance” on the screen. Perhaps even giving the font a dusky red hue would add to the eeriness, though one is usually told not to mess around with colors, that the words stand on their own. I would also suggest adding a third genre to give more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award and to help people find it when browsing. You could use “Personal,” or maybe “Drama” or even “Mystery.”

As a poem about struggling with inner demons, it treads ground that has perhaps been overused in modern culture, as every pop singer male and female has spoken or written or sang about their “demons.” Growing up, I always understood demons in the strictly literal, old fashioned, orthodox sense - if one had demons, it meant they were possessed, right? It wasn’t until I was scared out of my wits by discovering the band Imagine Dragons by way of their song Demons - long story *Rolling* - that I began to realize that the term is used much more loosely in secular society, referring to all manner of emotional issues and mental health struggles.

I don’t have anything else to say about the item… as one who plays loosely with poetry myself, I can’t advise you on the rules. The rhyme and structure flows well, leading us through the labyrinth of the narrator’s painful inner situation and leaving us wondering how they dealt with it.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Heartg*

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