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SMOKEY'S LESSON  [E]
One dark night the skills of trained BSA Scoutmasters were challenged by a curious bear.
by foxtale
Review of SMOKEY'S LESSON  
Review by Lyn's a sly fox
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Hi Foxtale

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Smokey's Lesson

First Impression: I chuckled that a bear wandered in to a campsite undetected by the leaders because typically they avoid humans. Not that I blame them any. We're not exactly the best cp-habitant an animal could want.
I also chuckled at the cajoled into becoming a boy scout leader. been there and bought that t-shirtl I was a den mother first and then a boyscout leader. Equal opportunity I also was a girl scout leader. What got me both jobs was my guide and kayaking skills. The boys loved discovering what creature left their foot prints behind. The girls were quit fond of kayaking down the river.

What needs your attention: I didn't note any punctuaion or grammar issues.

What part I liked best: Your struggle with getting the food cooler out of reach of the bear reminded me of a camping trip with our family when I was a kid. My father thought putting our tent by the lake was great. A moose wandered by, catching it's rack on one of the tent lines tied to the tree. It tore our tent and scared the daylights out of us kids. Thankfully, none of us was injured but we did learn moose are quite big.

Overall impression: The pacing of the story was good. The three Jim's added humor to the story. The characters felt believable to this reader.

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