*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4746475
Review #4746475
Viewing a review of:
 
SMOKEY'S LESSON  [E]
One dark night the skills of trained BSA Scoutmasters were challenged by a curious bear.
by foxtale
Review of SMOKEY'S LESSON  
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
House Florent Image for G.o.T. "The Iron Bank of Braavos "Game of Thrones

My name is Angelica, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Smokey's Lesson

First Impression: One dark night the scouts came into confrontation with a bear. The speaker was always drafted from the parent committee and this round was no exception. A camp is usually selected. High in the mountains. Jim and the speaker were on duty for boy scouts camp. After much stories and jokes the scouts headed to bed. The speaker woke Jim up and searched the camp. Food was left out in an ice chest. So worked to put the food out of reach. Then Jim warned the speaker to turn around. Right there was Smokey the grizzly bear. Jim scared Smokey off with a tin can. Then commented on how now Smokey has learned on how to use a rake.

This has humor as well as great details. The camp sounds like a beautiful place to go to. Up in the mountains of California. The bears make me second guess going there though. I wouldn't want to run into one close up. Still, worth seeing during daylight. Smokey is one smart bear with the ability to learn to use a shovel and a rake. Interesting twist. I hope Smokey leaves the camp in peace for the rest of the night. No frightened boy scouts.

What needs your attention: No spelling or grammar errors found.

What part I liked best: Smokey didn't harm anyone. Just sat quietly watching. Got spooked in a gentle manner.

Overall impression: Nice details as mentioned and Smokey indeed learned a lesson. How to use a rake. Maybe the bear could pick up the rake and tackle the food hanging out of reach. Joking. The camp sounds like a lovely place for boy scouts to go to. I love the description of the setting. Vital to the story. Boys have to cook meals themselves. I assume everything is supervised. Except for a nosy bear named Smokey. Humor is good too. Good job and keep up the good work!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

What does the Fox say?????

Listen Carefully

*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 04/20/2024 @ 9:28pm EDT
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4746475