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 Identicals  [13+]
Where individualism is seen as a bad thing, a revolt is constantly being thwarted..
by J.R. PETE
Review of Identicals  
Review by Beholden
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Review of Identicals by J.R. PETE

I rather like this story. It has a bare, unadorned feel that is quite in keeping with its subject, a conversation between computers in binary code. The whole tale is told through the terse messages passed between the computers, placing the reader squarely in that environment and mimicking the cold, calculating world of the machine.

It has some problems, however. The introduction of pure binary code is off-putting to most readers, I should imagine. Just the coded names is enough to establish the different feel to the world, leaving the first two lines unnecessary.

The conversation is hard to follow at times too. That's not a major fault since we can hardly expect to understand everything when computers are talking, but the less technologically enthusiastic among us may decide that it's too much for them. And our job is not just to hook readers - it's to hang on to them as well.

It's very hard to judge the writing style as a result of it being merely a record of computer thought. We would expect that to be dry, concerned only with fact, and empty of emotion. So again, it's a good evocation of the situation but not exactly attractive to the reader. The story is just about good enough to overcome this however. And did I detect a little emotion in the voice of the traitor computer on being discovered?
Perhaps that was only my own feelings getting in the way

In the end, it's a great idea, difficult to pull off effectively, and I think you have made a very good job of it. Well done!.

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