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TAKE YOUR PARTING GIFTS ON THE WAY OUT!  [13+]
Raising daughters is no easy task. Be prepared for high drama and laughs along the way.
by Ԝ€ß☆ԜiʈCH
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Ah, the drama of parenting daughters. You have captured the weirdness and frustration of such without being too personally specific, and given us a bright idea to help our own families out in such a way by preparing them for the inevitable growing up moment.

It’s really a very time honored thing to do, as evidenced by hope chests, dowries and other such things. Every family has a responsibility to set their daughters up in the right direction and provide love and support, up to a certain point, and it’s good to know your kids turned out ok and appreciate all the effort that went into their upbringing. As a daughter, I know the drama all too well, having caused plenty of havoc and mayhem in my day *Laugh*

Your narrative is clear, showing and telling without delving into dialogue or play-by-play that could slow it down or appear too fictionalized. We see a mother who wants the best for her girls and desires to avoid conflict in the most productive way possible.

I would definitely suggest using Size 4 Verdana font here, but aside from that I don’t see anything wrong. The mention of that French card game at the beginning is nifty; I had to google that real quick as I was reading. Perhaps a word count at the top would be a good idea so we know what we’re getting into.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Heartg*

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