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 | For Brittany's High School Graduation  [E] Written to my grand-niece Brittany for her high school graduation May 22, 2011  |
| (5.0)| Hi there, I'm Beacon and I found your Poem at random. I'm with the "Game of Thrones" and "The WDC Angel Army" . I enjoyed reading it and I hope you find this feedback useful.  I am the watcher on the walls. I am the shield that guards the realms of men. I pledge my life and honor to the Night's Watch, for this night and all the nights to come. My First impression: I liked the poem because it express how you felt about your grand-niece and I'm glad you wrote the poem about her. That's so nice. What I like: you can put the commas at the end of the paragraph. Another, you have shown so much love and care in the poem. When I read this, it made me realize what I went through in school. I had my son, and I had three months to graduate. I saw this, it reminded me of that time. Success is dependent on what's important to you. If you don't make your own dreams, Follow your own dreams, and Make your dreams happen, There's only one person responsible........YOU. Be strong, be courageous, be determined. Friends and family may not support your dreams, but they are YOUR dreams. But, my dear child, your family will Still Love You, and Support You, and Believe in the YOU that they know. After all, that's what we've been doing Since you came into and blessed our lives. Suggestion: The only suggestion I would have is to make the font be size 4, so people can see it when they review your poem. Final thoughts: When I read this, I thought about my own graduation and I wish my mom or someone wrote something to me like what you did for your grand niece. I hope she appreciates your poem because it means a lot to you and for her to graduate. Honestly, I hope she will do well, when she's going to college and get a degree into something, she wants to go after. I hope she keeps going and learn. I'm sure you are proud of her and you should be. Well, I enjoyed reading the poem and it really encourages me to keep going as well. Thank you for sharing Beacon  Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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