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The Time Crystal  [E]
Izzy must learn how to restore the forest's fading magic. Word Count: 650
by Krista of House Mormont
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Hello Krista of House Mormont! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones.

*Reading* This is a cute children's story. Short enough to keep a child's attention but long enough to entertain, thrill, and make the child eager to find out what will happen next. It's creative and imaginative. Nice job!

The Title and Description - Great title that drew my attention to the story. The description sums up the story nicely and urges me to read on.

The Storyline/Plot - A little girl must find the magical crystal to save the magic of the forest, which is quickly fading.

The Characters - We are able to learn the little girl's personality pretty well. I would have liked at least a paragraph to talk about the friends she had with her. We get to see them in action in the end, but it would have been nice to know them a little before the showdown.

The Setting - I would have liked to read about the magic fading and how it was affecting the woods a little. But I was able to envision each scene as I read. Good job!

What I Liked Best - I liked it when it got to the showdown, and her friends helped her save the magic crystal. And I liked the ending. Nicely done. *Smile*

I'll have to read this to my little granddaughter. Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us.

*Heart* Tracey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
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