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 The Beast of Blackbriar Swamp  [E]
A man travelling through a swamp on his way home encounters something terrifying.
by Detective
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Detective! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" .

*Reading* This was a good story with a bit of horror, suspense, drama, and mystery.

The Title and Description - I love the title. It holds an intrigue and sounds like an urban legend. Your description is well written and urged me to read on.

The Storyline/Plot - A man is traveling down a road in Blackbriar Swamp. He has heard about the monster that has haunted this swamp for a good part of his life. He's on horseback when loud noises start to disrupt the peace. The noise gets so bad, it spooks the horse who throws the rider off. The sounds and loud thrashes get louder and closer. Will he make it out of the swamp alive?

The Setting - Good job with the descriptions and details. They enabled me to envision each scene as I read.

Whar I Liked Best - The mystery of what was going to happen, and what type of monster was threatening him.

Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

*Bookopen* He urged the his horse

*Penv* than he was expected.

*Notepady* branch and lit

A comma is needed after branch

*Pencil* illumination then

illumination than

*Tack* his eye he

A comma is needed after eye

*Bookstack* stood between.

stood between them.

*Penb* his right had

his right hand

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.

*Heart* Intuey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
House Lannister image for G.o.T.



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