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Happily Ever After  [13+]
Watch out for that Troll toll!
by Genipher
Review by JACE
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Genipher .

I'm Jace, and it's my distinct pleasure to read and comment on your offering "Happily Ever After"  for the "I Write in 2024" .

*Note1* Overall Impression. I must admit, until I signed up for two very different activities this year on WDC--this writing challenge and the Game of Thrones event--I didn't spend much time reading (or writing) stories for contests requiring fewer than 300 words. I had thought even the contest you entered required very limited word count.

Still nice to keep learning.

I enjoyed reading your offering. Congratulations. You hit the prompt perfectly, sliding in under the word count maximum. I like a writer who can make every word count--I mean, matter--and still push that allowable limit. In my book that takes skill.

You caught me. Your use of fantasy to write a story about the IRS and taxes certainly was inspired. I bet anyone dealing with the real-world IRS needs a dose of magic in their pocket. Your imagination has come up with a winning storyline, in my humble opinion.

I enjoyed your back and forth between Tim? and Fairy Godmother (except for that part I mention below).

Imagine that. Falsifying tax documents. What will that (unnamed) scamp get away with next?

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations.

         *Bullet* I was a bit confused when I read the use of dearie by your protagonist.  I always imagined that term to be used by a female. It threw me a little reading it throughout the piece.  

         *Bullet* I enjoyed the pun of using Tinkerbell as the bell. It took me a while to get it; I think I expected some other part for Tinkerbell to play. Sometimes I'm slow, but I get there eventually.  

         *Bullet* I found no problems with your grammar and punctuation.    

*Star* My Rating.   5.0.  Good imaginative and well written tale.

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.

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