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What I Didn't Do Last Summer  [E]
I had an assignment from my class! :-)
by Itchybarn
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Itchybarn! I'm participating in the Game of Thrones Competition on our site. One of the tasks includes reviewing red case members. I heard that WDC had some little glitches this morning, so I didn't want to bother the big guy or your mom while they might be busy.
This gave me the opportunity to visit your port again. I think it's been a while since we chatted, so here I am!

Wow, what a fun story this is! I think it was clever of your teacher to give that assignment. Most of the time, we hear about teachers who insist their students write an essay about how they spent their summer.
This one was an assignment about how one didn't spend their summer! I thought that was very unique, indeed. I bet you and your fellow students had a blast writing it!

I'm going to work backward and speak about the ending, which I absolutely loved! You said, "I didn’t even get to say that I still had 900 million dollars left" LOL That was such a fun line! I might tell my husband that when we dream of winning the lottery. I'll mention what I want to do first, and then I will tell him, 'then I'll decide what to do with the rest of it'! *Laugh*

I had to go back and look at which genres you chose to list this in.
I would perhaps take out finance, and add in comedy instead. You wrote this, in my opinion, in a way that gave a bit of light humor, which I enjoyed very much.

I would jump up and down if I won a billion dollars.
That was a good start and set the scene for the fun times to come.

I didn't know what hunter-jumpers were, but I will look that up. Gosh, my daughter took horseback riding lessons for many years. I should know that! LOL

It was so sweet to include that you would also give a million to all of your closest friends. Great sentiments and the thought was there, as it is said. Thanks for sharing this great story.


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