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The Ghoul  [13+]
A haunted cliff top where suicide is encouraged.
by Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" .

*Reading* This is a good, creepy story. I enjoyed the horror, suspense and mystery of the writing. Nicely done.

The Title and Description - Good title that drew my attention. The great description urged me to read on.

For your genre picks, I'd add two more, perhaps Supernatural and Ghost. A lot of people find items to read by the genre only. I believe this will help draw more people to your piece. Also, for the Quills, if you're nominated, your writing can be placed in up to three categories if you have them listed.

The Storyline/Plot - A man sees a woman jump off a cliff but when he runs to investigate, he doesn't find any sign of her. The cliffs seem to be a harbinger of evil, and he's ready to put distance between him and them.

The Setting - You do a good job with the setting. It easily helped me to envision each scene as I read.

What I Liked Best - The buildup of the story, and the vivid descriptions. I also liked the ending.

A couple of typos that I found are below:

*Tack* journey away here,

journey away from here,

*Tackg* to put n the internet,

to put on the internet,

Thank you so much for sharing your story with us.

*Heart* Tracey

"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
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