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The Surprise in the Shed  [E]
A rainy night surprise
by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Review by StephBee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "The Surprise in the Shed from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones

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*Reading* THE POEM

A story about unlocked shed on a rainy night that needs to get locked. When the woman goes out to lock the shed up, she's in for quite a surprise!

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the poem told a story. There's a nice, light comedic tone to the poem with nice rhythmic beats that match emotional beats.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a ten stanza poem with four lines each.. The 1st and 3rd along with the 2nd and 4th lines rythme. The poem is has a nice beat when read out loud

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC. The poem is easy to read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "With light in hand, I slowly crept, and there I saw a hairless tail." -- It's a nice, easy visual that's easy to imagine, but not only that, it builds suspense well, uncovering the "thing" in the shed. What's next?!

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is perfect for the poem, and the opening engages the reader. This a fun, enjoyable read that I think readers can really identify with.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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