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Ink Out  [18+]
Jonathan uses a quill.
by dragonwoman
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Review of Ink Out  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello dragonwoman! This review is given on behalf of "Game of Thrones" .

*Reading* A good story of horror, mystery, and suspense. Can he truly trust what he believes to be true? Or should he run like crazy, as was his first instinct? Read on to find out.

The Title and Description - Great, and creative title that drew my attention to your piece, and the simple description piqued my curiosity to read on!

The Storyline/Plot - A roommate finds a quill pen with a drawer full of ink. He starts to write his paper and falls asleep. When he awakens, he finds words sprawled on his paper that he didn't write.

The Setting - Grear job on descriptions and details, so that I was able to envision each scene as I read.

Whar I Liked Best - The unexpected ending that I didn't see coming.

Suggestions - Below are a few suggestions. Please use or discard them as you see fit.

*Bookopen* - room mate's

roommate's

*Penb* throw it away,

No comma needed

*Tack* an historic

an historical

*Pencil* was great title

was a great title

*Books2* hand and words

hand and the words

*Penv* as he thrusted papers

as he thrust papers

*Notepad* very slowly spelt.

very slowly spelled.

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us. I enjoyed it.

*Heart* Tracey


"When you play the Game of Thrones you win, or you die." Cersei Lannister
House Lannister image for G.o.T.



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