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 You won the lottery? Now what happens?  [E]
Come have some fun and add a line to help write the rest of this story! Its up to YOU!
by AliceLvs2Write
Review by Annette
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello AliceLvs2Write

I found your interactive on the "Please Review"  page

First impression:

In your write up on the Please Review page, you ask for additions to your in and out. You should consider posting your in and out with the request on "Activities @ Writing.Com"  and "The Shameless "Plug" Page"  because those pages are not dedicated to asking for reviews. They are designed to help people find participants in activities.

What works:

You did a great job at choosing three genres that all combined with the title and intro line create a good bit of a backdrop to your story before it even begins. There is the promise of high drama and the need to keep things mysterious. The question: how would someone conceal a lottery win from their own family is sure to get the creative juices in the community flowing.

What needs work:

Someone added a line that goes well above the E rating that you chose and also demanded. I am not sure if you can delete it, but you should try.

Final thoughts:

Both the idea of hiding a lottery win as well as asking that the starting letter is the next one in the alphabet is a really fun way to create a cohesive story. I hope you get a lot of takers.

Annette
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