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Game of Thrones - House Lannister  [18+]
A place where I fight to survive
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         Review for entry/chapter: "A Distinct Humming
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Hi Tracey.

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: A Distinct Humming

First Impression: That room must have made Sharon feel overwhelemed I know it would me if I had discovered it. My curious nature would have kept exploring like Sharon did despite feeling uncomfortable.

What needs your attention: I think in this sentence the author intended that not the ---in her University, the she'll forever wish with everything she has, that she would have minded her own business.
Logistic question here- we traveled with her through corridors and wrought iron stairs that climbed in a circular motion but then when she released the androids- released the locks holding them to the chairs and opened the ground door that led outside to the woods. How did they get to the exit so easily?

What part I liked best: I loved the ending when Sharon realized that her good intentions may have released something more sinster than she could have imagined. Sounds to me like we need a chapter two.

Overall impression: The story was interesting but there is a logistics question that I think the author needs to consider if she decides to continue this fun story.

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