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 The Seven Original Sins  [E]
Fundamental vices that corrupt the soul and separate individuals from divine grace.
by Novice Mage
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is a nifty piece of writing, inspired by biblical principles and using personification to give voice to the seven sins and portray the destruction they wreak in clear and memorable terms. It’s not quite a poem, but it isn’t a simple list either, having elegant repetition and symmetry with a dash of colors to create visual interest.

We see each of the sins laid out with a sentence describing its effects upon one’s life, from Wrath which “extinguishes life” to Sloth which “suffocates growth with decay.” These are creative and ingenious illustrations of the damage caused by each sin.

I might recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure visibility across devices and to bring the words into clearer focus against the busyness of the typical WdC page. Also, it’s always recommended to choose three relevant genres for your items, to make them easier to find when browsing and to give more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award. I would suggest “Spiritual,” “Inspirational” and “Religious,” but there are others.

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