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Friendship--A Tribute  [E]
True friendship is often found in unexpected places.
by JACE
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and Happy Account Anniversary!

Ugh, I accidentally hit “load template” on my Review page and lost all that I’d written when the page reloaded. Lesson learned: use the “save and edit” feature often.

Friendship is a wonderful thing that crosses boundaries and barriers to provide a bond that lasts a lifetime, even if only in memories. Even if one of the friends is no longer available, the impact of the friendship on both parties is indisputable. I’m sure it’s nice for you to know that you’re both still present on this site. I’ll have to visit Shannon’s port soon.

This is an excellent personal essay about your early experience meeting someone and forming an online friendship with them based around the project you’ve described. I don’t have much to suggest other than the usual recommendation for larger font size and a word count. I like how you made sure to include a note about the contest it was written for at the top.

I noticed it has a slightly sloppy feeling, which might be hard to pin down. Perhaps it’s the repetition of Shannon’s full name from the 3rd paragraph to the 5th paragraph. But the information builds on itself in a reasonable way.

One of the best friends I’ve met around here is Joey's Spring has Sprung , who has helped me infinitely in my creative writing exploration. I couldn’t let this review go by without giving him a shoutout.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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