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 A Man's Hands  [E]
Thwe power of touch
by MoonChilde
Review of A Man's Hands  
Review by Choconut
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi MoonChilde ,

Thank you for entering your poem into "A Newbie Poetry Contest" . I am Choconut, one of the contest judges for the October round.

I am reviewing your poem, "A Man's Hands" , in affiliation with "The WDC Angel Army" .

Please remember these views are purely my own and any advice given is with the sole intention of being helpful.

First Impressions: As I first read this, I was impressed with your use of imager. I really liked the theme of hard vs. soft, rough vs, gentle that runs through the poem. It is an interesting topic, and I can honestly say I haven't read a poem like it before.

Voice/Tone: You explore masculinity, and the expectation placed on men, by writing about their hands. Your narrative voice works really well. I love this conflict between the tough protector that men feel they should be and the tender, loving people they often feel that they are.

Mechanics: The rhythm in this poem is fantastic. I love free verse poetry, and this is a great example of that. It flows really nicely.

My Favourite Part: The imagery. You show so much in your descriptions of hands. I love the part where you say men's hands are rough, then switch to, " ...gentle enough ... Soft enough to wipe her tears." That touched me. It is a very tender and soft image.

Suggestions: If I'm honest, I would have liked a little more depth in the imagery. It is good, don't get me wrong. I just feel like I could have been more moved if you put a little more emotion into it. But that is a minor suggestion.

Thanks for sharing your poem. I enjoyed reading it.

Most importantly, keep writing!

Choconut

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