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 UFO  [E]
A poem, about seeing an unidentified flying object
by StoryBob
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and Happy Account Anniversary!

A simple and amusing poem relating one’s paranormal experience of a UFO encounter in rhymes.

I noticed right off, you’ve used a very old-fashioned word that’s changed drastically in the last sixty years or so… “queer.” Does it still have the quaint meaning it used to in the UK? If not, perhaps you should consider changing it to “weird,” which would carry the same meaning and approximate rhyme without the potential of misunderstanding or someone being offended.

I see you’ve chosen all three genres, which is always recommended to help people find it when browsing. I might suggest Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and compatibility across devices, and perhaps centered text would look more “poetic.” If you want you could try submitting this to "The Humorous Poetry Contest" , though perhaps you don’t see it as humorous at all… which leads me to ask, is it a true story or simply a tall tale? I almost expected a little green alien to appear and tell you something or carry you off. Without that being added, it could easily be something that actually happened, judging by the tabloids.

The rhyme scheme is unique and engaging, as you’ve creatively matched four lines at a time. This was fun to read.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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