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Griffin's Blade  [18+]
WORK IN PROGRESS: A serialized novella about a very odd detective agency.
by Blimprider
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Jack,

This is a nifty start to your project. We are presented with two entirely disparate situations that appear to have no connection with each other, presented with precise details as in a movie. We see Rick’s impoverished retirement (was he forced into it? It’s hinted at in the poor recommendation from the lieutenant…) unfolded in the context of the gossiping front desk lady, and the wealth of Gabriel is demonstrated by his lifestyle and the lavish display room. This is a good example of weaving the “showing” through the story rather than narrating.

In my attempt to “connect the dots” of the upcoming sections, I considered at first whether Jamie was being unfaithful, and whether Stefan murdered his own wife as well as the other man. Judging by how considerate Gabriel was of his wife Jamie, I assume the infidelity on his part was an ominous misunderstanding, perhaps a distraction for some other motive. I also wonder about the significance of the murder weapon and how it relates to the story title. And I don’t see any specific references to the supernatural yet, though it seems to be implied in the uncanny ability of the agency to know Rick’s hardships.

In other words, you’ve set us up to want more, leaving us guessing as to the future of Rick and how he will encounter the crime scene and catch the murderer. What will be his first assignment, his instructions? Does he have any special powers he may not be aware of? I love a good mystery… I haven’t really read one I could sink my teeth into and make attempts at solving in years, perhaps, since I’ve hardly read much fiction at all since I “grew up.”

Your style is good, as always: realistic yet tasteful, with details that don’t plunge into the annoyingly visceral that some authors around here insist on. I prefer to have my senses engaged at a distance, which is always rather hard to explain (and even harder to balance when writing my own work.) This was an enjoyable read, and I look forward greatly to the rest of the story.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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