In the Hexagon

This is a fantasy story set in a world called Nispes. People can only live in a small, hexagonal section of the world. In order to leave this place and explore the outer world, they must defeat the keepers of the different types of magic. Or so the legend goes. This story follows Elya, a young sorceress, as she tries to break the seal set on her world.
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