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Double Etheree Lesson 3 - Etheree 01/16 - 01/22/11
Up
and down,
to and fro,
bouncing like a
little toy yo-yo.
My weight goes up and then
it goes right back down. I wish
to get off this merry-go-round.
Treadmill, elliptical, weight sets too,
it looks like I have a lot more to do.
Walking on the treadmill, starting first thing,
with miles to go and music to sing.
Elliptical stepping. Inches
sliding away, to sneak back
on, when I stop to play.
Endurance my main
goal, to conquer
this weight gain
and weight
loss!


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The assignment was to write an Etheree based off of the descriptions below:

3. double Etheree: consists of 20 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1 syllables.

Consisting of ten lines, the Etheree starts with a one syllable line, then adds one syllable per line, until the last line of ten syllables for an overall syllable count of 55. In other words the syllabic structure is as follows: 1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8-9-10. There are no other requirements for the Etheree; an Etheree can have a title or not, rhyme is permissible, but not required, and an Etheree can be on any subject. Etheree poets have elaborated on the form. There are now inverted Etheree (10-9-8-7-6-5-4-3-2-1) and double Etheree (where you start with a traditional Etheree, then add an inverted Etheree to create a twenty line poem).
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This poem has many faces. The poem itself is a metaphor.
First you have the Double Etheree poem.
Looking deeper, the poem is about the weight that fluctuates up and down. The poem starts small, and gets larger at the center (waist) then again smaller, representing the ups and downs of the weight fluctuations.
Looking further you have a poem with a rhyme pattern as well, that then ends in a non-rhyme conclusion statement.
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