It Was Her(Novel Folder)

This folder contains my biggest work in progress, the novel, It Was Her...I hope I'm not in over my head. I'm looking to make improvements so any advice is welcome and encouraged. It's ALMOST true-to-life I really want this to work and be extremely believeable, but to reach my goals I need feedback. It's pretty hard offend me, I'm a tough guy. Please leave a comment on whatever you read even if it's only the first paragraph. Thanks!