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Review of Game of Thrones  
Review by The bald writer
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Review Fiction · Genealogy · #2124970
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Hi

My name is ,Baldwriter I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: I Remember Daddy

First Impression: Your ability to set your characters personality and relationship eloquently and visually is wonderful.

What needs your attention: There have been many stories written about sibling relationships, contested wills, and family memories. The trick is to keep it original. I think you are off to a good start. You need to be careful not to fall into using cliché’s or overused story lines as you continue. That is the hard part. So far so good.

What part I liked best: You leave your story with many different possible story lines. What is the relationship between these sisters, their mother, and grandfather. What is Jez’z ability to remember a father she has not seen since she was 24 months old. So much more.

Overall impression: Obviously from my previous remarks, I enjoyed reading what you have written so far. I hope you decide to continue. Please let me know as you do.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.
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