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81 Public Reviews Given
82 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I always give the good with the bad. I don't believe in berating an author, but I also don't believe in fluffing an ego. I give it to you straight, but I won't leave you with just what's wrong because you should know what's right too. I don't like the dragon/fairy/hobbit type of stories. I don't keep them on my bookshelves because I just don't enjoy them and I don't review what I don't enjoy. I'm generally a pretty thorough reviewer and do a job befitting the author. Why bother reviewing if you don't do it well? PM me for poetry, because for short projects (poetry and shorter Short Stories), I'm happy to review for less GPs than my minimum. The minimum given is generally for chapters and novellas. More if you need an entire novel reviewed (that's a lot of work).
I'm good at...
I know my grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. Years of AP English and an English-nazi for a mother has left me stuck with those skills, lol. If your writing is rife with these mistakes and I find myself stuttering over them, I'll point them out to you. Otherwise I'm not a snobby stickler about it. I'm also good with prose and styling. I'll give my suggestions on where you could possibly use these tools give more flair and description where I think it might fit as well.
Favorite Genres
Mystery/ Detective and Crime genre, Dystopian Fiction, Poetry, Some Romance/Drama
Least Favorite Genres
I hate fairies/dragon stories, not a fan of Harry Potter/Lord of the Rings type stuff and I won't review it. I'm also not one for reviewing erotic fiction. While I enjoyed 50 Shades, it's not something I generally review, especially when it's overt.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, Short Stories, Chapters, Novellas, etc.
Least Favorite Item Types
Overly "emo" works. I'm fine delving deep into the emotional spectrum, getting introspective, but not a fan of overly dramatic "emo" type work. I'm also not a fan of overly erotic fiction works. They can be over the top and get uncomfortable quickly.
I will not review...
Magic/Fairy/Dragon type fantasy fiction, Star wars/Star Trek type fanfiction - sorry, I've always hated these kinds of stories. I'm not big on magic and wizardry, etc. I don't do over the top overtly erotic fiction either, love stories are fine, rated R even, but NC17 or X-rated stuff is not an arena I'm comfortable in giving my thoughts on.
Public Reviews
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Review of Awkward T  
Review by CJHanna84
Rated: E | (3.5)
I liked the humor in your piece. It was unique, but funny, and also sweet. The INT, EXT bit though is a little distracting. I assume you're meaning to represent introverted and extroverted, but it's hard to tell because of the abbreviation. Overall though, good work!


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Review of Randomness  
Review by CJHanna84
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Nice flow, you portrayed your anger well. The new age of taunting, or pushing and bullying, brought into a poem. Interesting take. It starts out feeling very angry, but ends up triumphant and almost smug. The piece emotes well and has a good flow.


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Review by CJHanna84
Rated: E | (3.5)
Continue! You got your reader interested in your character and your plot development. You had good flow and concept. I liked it and I'd like to see where you can take this. You have a few different avenues to take and it'd be interesting to see which road you choose. Keep writing :)


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Review of Always  
Review by CJHanna84
Rated: E | (3.0)
I have a few bits of constructive criticism for you. I get the apocalyptic plot, the overall idea, but your execution encountered a few issues. First, your initial explanation is a little lacking. Try to do some research and expand. It all comes to play too quickly with little to no background, which is the next issue. The entire story happens too quickly with no build ups. You need more development and detail. I'd also suggest working on repetition. You use the phrasing "gotten worse" too many times. Try avoiding reusing the same phrases or words over and over. Use new phrases and synonyms: it escalates, it worsens, etc.

You obviously have creativity and the possibility of a good story idea, I would just suggest trying take these suggestions under advisement and working to expand upon your story. Develop your plot and develop your characters and you could have a good story on your hands :) Good luck!


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Review of Burnout  
Review by CJHanna84
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a great short. I love your introduction with the Churchill quote. This is a great piece and if you expand upon, I'd love to keep reading. Getting someone to want to keep reading is half the battle of writing and you accomplished that. You also did a great job at setting the scene and making the reader feel like they're apart of it.


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Review of The Lone Angel  
Review by CJHanna84
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
In the beginning you switched tenses. You started writing in the past tense and by the first sentence of dialogue you moved into present tense. Try to be aware of which tense you're using. Switching writing tenses confuses the reader. I also felt like your story moved too quickly. You should develop this a little more. Revisit and keep going. I feel like there's more to be told. I'm not referring to your jump to Lucy 7 years later, your intentions there were clear and understood. I'm referring to your timing after that. I often experience the same problem. I have an idea in my head and I'm so quick to get there before I lose it that I end up leaving bits out and the piece feels too rushed. What helps me is to go back and re-read after a little time has passed and the details come to me then so I can add depth to the bits in between. I'd love to re-read this again if you decide to add to it. Keep writing!


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Review of Tick. Tock  
Review by CJHanna84
Rated: E | (3.5)
You set the stage with the opening lines and start with a good rhythm, but occasionally you lose the rhythm which makes the reader stutter a bit. Overall a good piece, but maybe re-read it and see if you feel any edits come to you. Sometimes when I revisit a piece I've written, new inspiration strikes me :) Good piece, keep writing.


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Review of Stay  
Review by CJHanna84
Rated: E | (3.5)
I feel the emotion you're trying to portray, but i feel that some of your phrasing trips up the reader which stunts the flow. You're a good writer, but maybe if you concentrate less on finding the rhyme and more on the rhythm it will feel less staccato and more fluid.


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Review by CJHanna84
Rated: E | (4.0)
Your writing is excellent. A few punctuation errors and typos here and there, but the writing itself is great. You show real talent. Now, you can see this piece in one of two ways. 1) Depressing. You wish Nikolai hadn't fallen with her, but pulled her back so she could have a chance at life with her new ray of hope, of light, in her otherwise daunting existence or 2) The beginning of an intriguing story of about two lost souls roaming the earth for eternity. The things they see and encounter. Souls they may witness pass into their plane of existence. Either way, I'd really like to see this story continue. Keep writing :)


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Review by CJHanna84
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Beautiful. Wonderful imagery and emotion. I will even admit that your prose choked me up. It wasn't saccharine or overdone. It was just perfect. You did a fantastic job and showed real talent. Your writing is expressive, imaginative, and emotive.


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Review by CJHanna84
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Great twist and comment on the encroaching influence of technology on our collective creative conscience. Intriguing start, descriptive, yet not overly flowery prose, overall a great short! And the introduction of your commentary on technological influence was provided with a lovely dose of comedy rather than being presented on soapbox. Great job :)


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Review of The Sound  
Review by CJHanna84
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very interesting. A little reminiscent of Poe and The Tell-Tale Heart, but in a good way, not in a copy cat kind of way. You weren't overly descriptive, but still did the story justice. I got a good feel and image of Fred's apartment and his interactions. I was able to empathize with his move-in disaster plight, having been there myself, yet was still somewhat surprised by the turn the story took. And even with him possibly being a touch mad, I still felt bad that his father was such a jerk. Great job :)


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Review by CJHanna84
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like this, it's quite intriguing and draws you in. It makes the reader want to keep reading, which after all is half the battle. Your use of humor and a unique descriptive matter blend very well into the beginning of a great story :)


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