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Review of Epiphany  
Review by Cosine213
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like this. I'm a great fan of poems and acrostics are so much fun. I enjoyed the way you used the word as your theme.

I did feel that the lines could be shortened in order to improve the rhythm and flow of the poem, but other than that I think it's a really great piece.
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Review of A DREAM  
Review by Cosine213
Rated: E | (3.0)
You have some great imagery here.

However, the phrasing of "three whistles scuttled" is odd because a whistle has no legs and can't actually scuttle. Mother should be capitalized, and there should be quotation marks around the last line to indicate it's dialogue.

I like the tension of the thrill of being caught, even though you don't specify what it is they're doing that could cause them to be in trouble. For all we know, they could just be watching Netflix or doing needlepoint. I like that it's left to the reader's imagination. Not everything should be explained in a story and you did that really well.
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