This is a beautiful poem with nice rhythm and full of amazing poetic expression. So impressive is some of your phrasing here that this poem will likely surface in my mind many times. Exquisite... did I say that already? Breathtaking? Yes.
You mentioned in your post that the prompt "mystic enchantment" was the one you used; however, it was not the title or a phrase within the poem. Are you committed to your present title?
It is truly a beautiful poem, T.L. Thank you for sharing it. We hope to see more of you!
This freestyle poem is a lovely use of the "aromas from the kitchen" prompt. I could almost smell the pineapple myself! It felt to me a beautiful tribute to an elderly loved one that allowed me to have emotion for both "characters." The little random things that stick out in our memory... like that she still had all her own teeth and the poignant reflection that her kitchen would not be hers much longer. I might interject here that in a way it is still her kitchen.
I was somewhat curious about the line "with only seconds to work with" to try to memorize every detail of her appearance. It sounds as if the writer is not expecting to see the woman's face again after she turns around?
Thank you for a warm, heart-felt entry for this contest prompt. We hope to see more of you!
Regards,
~des
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Breathtaking? Yes.