This is a really neat. I wonder what happens in the second chapter, what had happened to Emirepir that night she disappeared? Or if the narrator left in search of her? That's the foreshadowing of throughout the chapter, I believe. It's a great thing to keep the reader's attention. The beginning might not have such as strong an effect on the readers as when they get into the middle part. I'm intersted in reading the second chapter.
This is a really neat poem. Shooting stars would be fun to watch, but the way you describe fears is even more intersting. Blind me in a state of cycles is my favorite phrase out of the poem. Keep up the writings.
This is really neat. I've been to California to visit some relatives twice. Never experienced an earthquake.
Lake Wikaboug sounds like a nice quiet place, perfect to draw and think and a few other stuff. The lake I know is on the peaceful side is the Wildcat(name been changed this year) six miles from Virginia. Lake Michigan didn't seem like a lake at all, it looked like the ocean, but very shallow. Great details, and of adding some memories about the lake. Keep up the work, and you'll be able to publish it.
This is a really cute poem. Maybe a little short, but I'm sure you're a great poet. Poems are something I am really new at writing, but it's easier to read. That phrase, "Just fine." is something I use almost all the time. Keep on writing.
This poem is a really neat poem. The line I'd say I like best is The conscious mind will try so hard because it describes your efforts, which sometimes happen to me. I will read some more of your writings, and keep up the good work!!!
This is a neat story. It conveys a lot of emotion and feelings about what happened to the character's mom and wanted to have encouragement. The place where it's really descriptive is where it says that she changed her mind. Keep on writing.
This is really neat. It gives some suspense to the mood, or else it shows the feeling very well. I like the first line, where it says ... where geniuses are walking among us. because it gives a neat description about what the poem would be afterwards. I'm intersted in reading some more of the things you might put up.
This is a really neat poem. I like how it describes why the bird sings in it's lifetime. I like in the end it tells the bird still sings, no matter what is going on. The song will always be there.
I like this poem. It does describe about the statue that represents freedom. I like the vision of birds flying around her crown, and the flame burning in the porch. Very creative. It does use imagination to about why the statue is there on an island. Peace is always something everyone wants to live by. You're doing good work. Keep it up.
This fiction is gooood. There's a suspense in the end.
I'm curious about what would happen next. I like the way it describes his daughter being gone.
Divorces are nasty and can get violent. I do agree with that. I hope you write more.
This is really neat. The description that this poem has gave me a clear picture, especially where, at the middle, it stats "Reality is my nightmare, always trying to do my best...".
That is what I like best about the poem. Keep up the writing.
Very neat. I like the way it describes what pain is compared to a runner, like an extended metaphor. (I'm learned this in English class, so I hope I fully understand what a extended metaphor is.) The description of what a runner does before the race starts is intersting. This is all for now.
This is really neat. Lots of details, enough to let me get a visuall idea to what the poem wants you to picture. In the first verse, I picture the pen. In the second, I picture a flashback compared to the ocean. In the third, I visulize the solace. Great writings, and keep it up.
This story is really neat. There's a lot of details in the conversation which, if observed closly, than You could guess the characteristics about the charaters talking to each other. I think the turning point of the story was when Marlyn realized her mother was in trouble. Then she showed courage and bravery went to China to take care of her mom. I love that description in the end.
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This is a really neat. I wonder what happens in the second chapter, what had happened to Emirepir that night she disappeared? Or if the narrator left in search of her? That's the foreshadowing of throughout the chapter, I believe. It's a great thing to keep the reader's attention. The beginning might not have such as strong an effect on the readers as when they get into the middle part. I'm intersted in reading the second chapter.
It gives some suspense to the mood, or else it shows the feeling very well. I like the first line, where it says 
I like in the end it tells the bird still sings, no matter what is going on.