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Review Style
While I will give input on any spelling, grammar, and punctuation, I much prefer to rate based on how the content flows and feels to me as a reader. Even if there is room for improvement, I always prefer to stay on the positive side of things. To be honest, every writer has room for improvement. We're all works in progress.
I'm good at...
reviewing poetry. Because poetry is mostly about feelings and imagery (and a little bit about form), I find that poets find my advice to be more helpful than other writers. I like to immerse myself in whatever I'm reading, and the strong feelings evoked in poetry tends to resonate with me better than other forms of writing.
Favorite Genres
I like fantasy, scifi, horror, and drama, but I will read other things. I love monsters, vampires, weird happenings, and things like that.
Least Favorite Genres
I'm not a huge fan of romance and erotica. That's not to say that I wont review a fantasy novel that includes romance or erotica, but I can't take a lot of it.
Favorite Item Types
Poetry, short stories, chapters, novellas, and crosswords.
Least Favorite Item Types
Novels. It's not that I don't want to read your story (I really do), but I am a slow reader. If you want me to review your book, you will have to do so with the expectation that it will take me while.
I will not review...
Fanfiction. Aside from the issue of knowing who the characters are in their original setting, I don't really care for it in general.
Public Reviews
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Review of Bloody Mary  
Review by Sorji
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oh my god! I love this! Two very different stories brought together in beautiful rhymes! Plus, I love dark poetry.

I didn't see any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors.

I think you should submit this to poetry contests if you haven't already.

Keep on writing!


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Review of A Cowboy's Heart  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is very interesting for a couple of reasons. One, I don’t see much poetry about cowboys, not even on WDC. Two, it’s very vivid and even tells a little bit of a story. I love it.

I don’t see any spelling/grammar/punctuation errors.

This is awesome! Keep on writing!


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Review of Where We End  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed this poem. This is one of the few styles of form poetry that I actually don't mind because it takes more skill than just finding a rhyming word or repeating a line. I think you put a lot of thought and energy into this, and I like it.

Also, I think you need a comma to separate the words in the second line.

I know this is an older poem, but I hope you still see the merit in it as I do. *Smile*


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Review of Finite  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like this little sequence that you've put together here. It feels very much like a short nightmare. I've had nightmares like that before. It's very well-written and thought-out

I have a couple of suggestions.

You don't need the "And" at the beginning of the second and third sentences. Also, you might want to combine that third sentence with the fourth (slept. Except..). I would either take out the period and make it one sentence, or if you really need that pause, make it an ellipse (slept...except).

It's still quite good, though. Keep on writing!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This is a very interesting piece and very well-polished to boot. I'll start with the boring stuff. I didn't find any spelling, grammar, or punctuation problems.

Moving on. I ran into chapter 3 of this by means of the review mixer and tracked it back to your portfolio so that I could get a better idea of what I was looking at. This is very good. Toby is very believe-able. His dialogue is simple and easy to follow without making him seem unintelligent. I love the details of him going to the library to read and use the internet. It makes the story seem more real because it really could be happening in modern times that way. John was interesting too. Though, he's not as clear in my head as Toby is. I imagine that's on purpose because John will become more important as the story unfolds.

I'm curious about why this isn't on the Novel Workshop board, but I'm guessing it's because it isn't ready or isn't intended to go up there. Maybe it's just a side project. Either way, this is definitely worth a read. I may have to come back and read the other chapters some time.

Happy Thursday!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the simplicity of this poem. There is great imagery and feeling captured in your words. It is a very relateable scene and feeling, which I love. It really connects the reader with the item.

If I was going to change anything, I think I would combine a couple of your shorter lines, like:

"swaying back and forth"

or

"swaying,
back and forth"

I just think it looks strange and reads a little bit strange because of all of those short lines in the middle.

I didn't see any issues with spelling/grammar/punctuation.

Anyway, overall, I very much enjoyed this poem. I tend to like free-form poems and poems about nature, so this really appealed to me.

I hope you keep writing! *Smile*


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Review of My Fire Burns On  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the imagery that you create in this poem. It's very simple and vivid. I like that you use punctuation on some lines and left some without to create enjambment. The feelings emitted are also quite strong. Below are a couple of minor fixes that you might consider.

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem! *Smile*

We were part of the inferno - comma or period at the end of this
Your dress a bright crimson to match - comma after dress


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Review of Hindi Masti Song  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (1.0)
This looks like gibberish. I do not know if this is a translation issue on my end or yours, but, based on the lack of coherent words or letter-groups and the haphazard punctuation, something is amiss here. If this is supposed to be able to be read, I suggest you edit the formatting or re-upload it. If this really is just gibberish, please remove it. You are wasting others' time and energy, not to mention space on the website.


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Review of Depression  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this poem. The way in which it describes the thoughts and feelings associated with depression is spot on. If I was going to change anything, I would add punctuation to the ends of your lines. It really only bothers me because I want there to be a comma at the end of the second to last line, but that would look strange if the other lines don't have periods or exclamation points. Or maybe ellipses (...). It's just a suggestion, though. *Smile*

Great poem! Keep on writing! *Smile*


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Review of A Force of One  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
I can see that this is an older poem, but I really enjoyed it. I love your use of enjambed lines and end-stopped lines. One without the other is just sort of pointless. I also like the overall message of the poem. It is very positive and uplifting without feeling pushy. Overall, I enjoyed this poem.


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Review of The Vendetta  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow. You packed A LOT of great imagery and detail in a very short piece! I love it! Telling a story with imagery instead of coming out with it all in words is so much harder but very rewarding!

Anyway, I can see this is an older piece, but I did find a few minor errors, if you're interested in polishing it a little. I outlined them below.

Overall, I very much enjoyed reading your flash-fiction entry and hope you did well in the contest! *Smile*


doorway, almost afraid - I think you need a comma here.

young office was - I think you meant officer

moved away, and Brady - comma

The still wet mass - still-wet should be one word here

Sergeants - Sergeant's <- ownership


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Review of Tattooed  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This might sound kind of weird, but as I fell into your rhyme scheme, I started hearing it as a rap. I normally don't care for rap, but this really had a great beat to it and fantastically positive message, of course. I love it! Your punctuation is spot on, and it's the perfect length so that it doesn't feel preachy and overdone. Very good! Keep on writing! *Smile*


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Review of Love and Need  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I had to look up some information on the form you are using here to make sure I understood it well. It looks like you nailed it. You followed the form perfectly while still making a strong statement with your content. I also love that, despite your short lines, you still used proper punctuation. I love the way it reads. Very good! Keep on writing!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.0)
I do like your representation of writer's block, and it's very cool that it was co-written. Working with others isn't always easy, after all. I also love your use of punctuation and enjambed lines, but I see some punctuation that looks strange to me

fled, the - it looks like this should be the end of a sentence and beginning of another.

appears, it - same here

With some - there is a period before the w, so I think it should be capitalized

tumble, my - this also looks like it should be made into 2 complete sentences

say. - I would make that period a comma or capitalize "And"

These are just suggestions to make your punctuation look a little more crisp and clear throughout the piece. Overall, it is still very good! Keep on writing! *Smile*


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Review of The Cheater  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I know this is one of your older pieces, but it is very well-written. The dialogue is realistic, the actions are clear and easy to understand, and the language is nice and simple. The end leaves the reader feeling just a little bit stressed because it is unresolved, which isn't a bad thing. It might make one think about what they would say and do in that situation or what his excuse might be. I like it. *Smile*


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love your use of cold as the bad guy here. Water freezing into snow is not normally used to describe love gone bad, but I like it. It also lends well to that whole "heart freezing over" thing. I also like the way your stanzas are set up, and I didn't find any spelling or grammar errors. Very good! *Smile*


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Review of Awake  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E
I like what you have here, but if you are looking to improve it, I would separate it into separate stanzas: One stanza for the waking up, one stanza to talk about waffles and coffee, and then the last to talk about the drowsiness drifting away. It would help some of your lines stand out a bit more too. It's just a suggestion, though. Overall, I do like it and didn't see any spelling errors or anything. Very good! *Smile*


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Review of Depreciation  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this poem. It has great imagery and repetition of important words. I also love this use of "fusion" as an action which the Fusion was a part of. It has good flow, great rhymes, and I didn't see any spelling/grammar/format errors. Very good! Five stars! *Smile*


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Review of One Last Time  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very cute poem. It evokes feelings of nostalgia for me. I think a lot of people did something like this when they were younger to put off the inevitable bed time. I love the repeating line and how the meaning of it changes with each stanza. And, on top of all of that, I don't see any spelling issues or anything. Very cute! {e:smile)


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Review of Elemental  
Review by Sorji
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I know you only have the one line, but based on your description, rating, and genre, this sounds like it could get really interesting. If that line you have there is going to be the first line of the story, you are off to a good start because I am immediately drawn in by stress and the fear it evokes. It looks like you are going to start your reader in the thick of it, which is a great tactic, especially for fantasy stories. I hope to eventually see that rest of this. *Smile*


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Review of Writer's Cramp  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem. It is very simple and straightforward. I do like your use of enjambed lines throughout the piece, but I think you need a comma between "and" and "much" because that starts its own little clause. It just looks a little strange to me. I also like the centered formatting. Because it is such a short piece, it looks nicer and compliments the length of your lines. Very good! *Smile*


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Review of Flow  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like your rhyming scheme in this poem. It is fun and interesting, just like the content. I like how one could take the imagery for what it is or ponder any deeper meanings the poem might hold. I don't see any spelling/grammar/punctuation mistakes. Very good! Keep on writing!


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Review of Now Silently  
Review by Sorji
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What an interesting take on the image given. Most people might have thought of romance or the holidays, but you took it a totally new an interesting direction. I really like it. Though, I do think that, if you are going to have colored font, maybe it should be blue. Green makes it look like it's going to turn into a story about Christmas. Just a suggestion. Very good! Keep on writing!


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Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (5.0)
While I do agree that reading is a fantastic use of leisure time, I do not see gossiping with friends as a complete waste. I mean gossiping in general is not exactly a great thing to do, but sometimes it helps you sort out your thoughts on something or come to some sort of new understanding. Still, I do value and appreciate this little insight into the wisdom you have to offer. Keep on writing! *Smile*


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Review of Stop the Clock  
Review by Sorji
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really liked this poem. I think it is very relatable and, at the same time, makes the reader think about what is so different about this narrator's childhood from others'. I do suggest Capitalizing the first letter of each line (makes it look uniform) and adding periods at the ends of certain lines to show complete thoughts. Just a couple of suggestions to make it look nicer, is all. Overall, it is a very good poem. Keep on writing! *Smile*


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