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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Ths is a requested review. I often review spiritual things

Overall impression of piece: I know most of these. I also write in similar veins. You certainly have an extensive array of scripture here. I can see some of the reasons for perhaps their choice.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* Most of your scriptures have a leading title. It helps to know where you are going with these. There is no way I can say you are wrong. I know the author. They all pretty much address man's need for significance and to find their God

What I disliked*Idea* You do kind of copyright this at the bottom. I have to admit; I have heard this before. Most of us really do a lot more scripture than we think we do. What is really needful is for someone to give a personal depth and testimony to the words. These words obviously mean something or they wouldn't be in the best selling book on the planet. What do they mean to you?

How the piece made me feel You can write something meaningful about one or two verses. I would rather do one thing well, than have folks wonder what is being said.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I write some on my family. I was amused by this. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: I pretty much get all of this. My grandparents were pretty amazing. One was an immigrant who never really totally left Italy. One was a Baker

Grammatical and spelling errors: You have a very colloquial style and I kind of liked it. I wondered about grammar, but professor Grammarly, the program, didn't mark it up much

What I liked?*Smile* This is a great down home description of some real "down home" types of characters. I love your reactions, although it seems unclear how old you were. I could guess and that probably was enough

What I disliked*Idea* I couldn't really get a feeling of why you wrote this. There was a prompt, but I need to be brought in on this

How the piece made me feel I don't know anything about you from your port. It really helps to know who you are reviewing. I liked having the picture. I have had eccentric family. Now I get to be that.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Sleeping Rough  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: You do have talent. You write about something that you know

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* There are rhymes here. They are subtle and add to the readability of the piece. I could get the feeling that you had seen this, heard it and felt it. That is creative writing at its best.

What I disliked*Idea* I could use a little more direction at the end of lines to help us be able to read it like you wrote it. Continuing a sentence on another line works best if you start it with a small case letter

How the piece made me feel We have no idea what this is like in the world most of us live.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual things

Overall impression of piece: Intriguing effort. You have age-old questions

Grammatical and spelling errors There are so many errors in grammar. I almost don't know where to begin. You have sentence fragments. You miss all kinds of periods at the end of sentences. AIDS, the disease, is all caps. Prayer must be edified and then you write another sentence without any way of connecting those. God is capitalized in some places, but not others. God's is missing an apostrophe.. There are others, but this kind of gives the gist. Voracity has to do with being voracious. I miss the connection or you used the wrong word/ Edified means to be built up--perhaps the wrong word

What I liked?*Smile* These are kind of universal precautions in following God. You have caught a lot of them

What I disliked*Idea* Grammar makes the other points kind of hard to see. I would leave a line in between paragraphs. That is block formatting. It is hard to read on the screen

How the piece made me feel Most would not review this. Spell and grammar checks are a must. Grammarly is a free download to your computer. Put something about yourself. It gives reviewers information that is handy in a review.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Insomnia  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Welcome to the dark, spooky review night. I generally don't do these pieces, but your caught my eye.

Overall impression of piece You have caught what insomnia looks like. It is not for the faint of heart

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* There is nothing like graphic imagery. I can see it and feel it. You have good end rhymes as well as rhyme in the lines.

What I disliked*Idea* Seems a little over the top, but maybe I had to be there. I see this as a giant run-on sentence which may be all right, but a little disconcerting

How the piece made me feel: There is hopelessness here. No one is hopeful is such circumstances

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of a Newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC. You do have creativity

Overall impression of piece You have answered the question of what it was like to watch the dead die with visceral and heart felt forms

Grammatical and spelling errors : Thank goodness you punctuate. This reads very well. Some would use a line with a continued sentence as starting with a lower case.

What I liked?*Smile* You showed what you meant and just didn't tell us. You have engaged just about all the senses. You have enough rhyme in here to make it more readable. They are well done

What I disliked*Idea* No major discrepancies

How the piece made me feel I am a veteran. It does strike a cord within me. We do forget unless reminded. Every year, on Westpac, in Peace time, the Navy did have fatalities

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Review of Love  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. A lot of people write on love.

Overall impression of piece Your ideas are reasonably unique

Grammatical and spelling errors Love is rare needs to be followed by a semicolon. You have two complete sentences. After Everything with make sense, they say. It is really a continuation of a thought. From the Movie, the Titanic

What I liked?*Smile* The movie example os first rate. It really does show what you are talking about. If it was the real story, no one knows.

What I disliked*Idea* I really don't know enough about Bonnie and Clyde to know about love. There love ended up with holes in it.

How the piece made me feel The best definition of love I have heard is "Putting someone else's self-esteem above your own." Be sure you put something down about yourself. It really helps us as reviewers.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (2.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like nonfiction. I have never been to Beijing

Overall impression of piece. You like going back, but you don't. We are all marvelously complex. Virginia Wolfe said, "You can't go home again

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* We are people of mixed emotions. I can accept that.

What I disliked*Idea* Flee what? Why? We need a whole lot more. This is a complex thought. We can never really be able to follow what you are saying

How the piece made me feel I assume you are a native. We Americans have gone view places. We really want to know what it is like

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Review of My Only Request  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: Love is complicated stuff. You certainly got that right

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads very well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This has very clever rhyme and rhythm. It sounds almost Shakespearean. You have made a connection here in the poem and describe it very well

What I disliked*Idea* Pretty good. No errors

How the piece made me feel Jealousy is about possession and I would wonder about the possibility of friendship. They seem to be opposites. It is a reflection of the darkness we all fight against.

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Review of When I Grow Up...  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Since you have signed on to our group, you deserve a review. I read your bio and this piece. I can see commonalities

Overall impression of piece: My guidance counsellor threw up his hands in despair as to how to counsel me. I was drawn to too many things

Grammatical and spelling errors Because I am a writer is a clause. I would consider a colon and adding this at the end. Perhaps a dash might work also

What I liked?*Smile*I can really identify with all of this. I have had 35 years in medicine, but even that has taken me to various different things. We only really scratch the service of who we are supposed to be. We are a child of the King!

What I disliked*Idea* Is it ideas or is it words? That kind of remains unclear. I can only speak out of my own mind and heart when I say, if I can write it down I can understand it and see things much more clearly. I need a little more detail on how this works for you

How the piece made me feel What a wonderful life!

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in a spiritual newsletter and it captured my attention

Overall impression of piece: This is spiritual and wise. It is not preachy. You show what you mean

Grammatical and spelling errors: No noticeable errors

What I liked?*Smile* You do know quite a bit about these birds. They really do like to be a part of their flock. I see spiritual ties in the ties to the master. There are obviously a lot of hawks in our world today that aren't sports teams. They do horribly when they are neglected.

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel Do we do horribly when we neglect ourselves? I am not sure a bird would have thoughts like that. Even sheep are pretty dumb.

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Review of I am  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie review newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece There is a lot here. I get this. It is far from nonsense.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Life is confusing. It doesn't take a bunch of life experience to figure that one out

What I disliked*Idea* I prefer gut to guts, but just personal preference. Since we have 13-year-olds reading this, I might rate this a little higher

How the piece made me feel This is personal. I believe what you have said. Be sure to say a little about you on your port. It really helps reviewers.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece From the shameless plug page. I often respond to those things without reviews.

Overall impression of piece There are intense feeling here.

Grammatical and spelling errors Most do say at least is two words, Grammar would probably put a comma after

What I liked?*Smile* Love is always about the other person. You do have understanding. It is about their happiness

What I disliked*Idea* Mold me into a picture frame is interesting but I have a hard time placing it with a picture that is already there. I am not sure what it is you are saying

How the piece made me feel It is a lifetime of wrestling with issues like this. Even older men have long-term struggles.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is from the requested review file. I always appreciate nonfiction. It is mainly what I write. I do have a family section

Overall impression of piece: For a young man, this is very impressive. There is a depth of understanding I would not have expected.

Grammatical and spelling errors Short choppy sentences could better be handled with a colon and a list? Technically, not wrong as written

What I liked?*Smile* I love the introduction of the photographs. It is detail that makes this writing work. We all have a picture of what people are like. No one wants to work with living; they save their best for funerals. You have caught the human condition

What I disliked*Idea* Nothing substantial

How the piece made me feel My wedding was in 1974. I pondered when my Dad died about how to eulogize an absentee father. Honesty works, as it has done here. Keep writing.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. I have a sound background in history and science so am pretty well aware. I am a long-termed church member

Overall impression of piece: This is a great summary without being exhaustive.. Books have been written

Grammatical and spelling errors: World War and Holocaust are proper names and need capitals

What I liked?*Smile* You have an encyclopedic knowledge on this. I learned stuff from this. I too get the feeling that he was a religious man. A deathbed confession was that he was wrong. I couldn't make much of this

What I disliked*Idea* That Charles Darwin is kind of redundant as the piece is about him. I think we need more in the beginning about where you are going with this. I am going towards X. Maybe there are a few too many digressions, like Hitler's eugenics.

How the piece made me feel This has so many feelings tied to it. Fundamentalists can be quite intolerant towards any views that are not theirs. Jesus wasn't intolerant to anyone, except Hipocrits. The reason why most American equate Darwinism with atheism is that when Clarence Darrow defended the teacher at the Scopes trial, he was noted as a profound atheist--which he was.

Personally, given my background in science, I have a hard time with the world being created in 6000 years.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Little Bear  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of a newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is unique and different. It has a lot of believability

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* You description of the outdoor life is exemplary. This is kind of a passage of time type of thing. So many of us have to go through it. It is not easy

What I disliked*Idea* Exempliary may not be the right word. Excellent in quotes might work better. Why you are buying into Indian mysticysm is not immediately apparent. It is ok though, with my bias.

How the piece made me feel We are not so different. I kind of like the cross-cultural connection. I don't think the nature of man and woman has changed so much. The story smacks of reality because these things happen. They should not. (My bias)

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this advertised on a side panel. I like history and know some bipolars

Overall impression of piece: This is a pretty impressive piece of research. Genius and mental issues have a very fine line

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* The list of people on your list is quite impressive. I like the listing of other sources

What I disliked*Idea* A minor point: a link can be made so we could click on it. I think the real issue I have with this is why write this. I think we all have a bias and it often is more interesting than the actual story. As a reader, we want to know what you think

How the piece made me feel Many bipolars die young. The types of drugs they get put on are often not conducive to long-term health. This could be intriguing depth to investigate.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Love  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece A newbie review advertised from a side panel . With the billing you gave, I had to have a look.

Overall impression of piece There is truth here.

Grammatical and spelling errors: After life in the last stanza, a colon would work better.

What I liked?*Smile* This is an explanation of a conundrum of something as old as time. It is personal, honest and sincere. I believe you believe in all these things and quite frankly, I can agree.

What I disliked*Idea* There is a lot of telling in this poem . Life is ... I think the best poetry expresses a feeling and endeavors to get the reader to feel the same way. It kind of comes off as a lot of platitudes.

How the piece made me feel Few folks look at what this is going to cost. It seems kind of analytical the way it goes together. In some ways, it is refreshing. We do need to think about it. It is also transformative. I am never sure how it is going to end up. Love is something you decide to do.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the requested review page

Overall impression of piece: A short sweet poem about a short sweet subject.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is pretty tightly crafted. Rhymes are pretty good. We think these things are accidents, but perhaps not.

What I disliked*Idea* I don't know min-a-mins. I know he is featherless from the intro, but most poems don't have intros. Maybe freezing as cold did creep. It would make more sense with the warm Earth

How the piece made me feel We are part of the cosmic picture. Some argue that we are stardust in the first place.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I am up to the challenge> It is a classic picture and poem

Overall impression of piece Picture has already been reviewed.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads very well and easily. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is a tightly written piece with an almost classical look to it. I like the rhyme. It really increases readability but is not overdone or forced

What I disliked*Idea*

How the piece made me feel This uplifted my spirits. I think that is its design. Life on Earth is hard. The ultimate answer is that Jesus and us win.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of The Resurrection  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The greatest image that no one ever saw. Of course, there was new growth. That is the encounter with the risen Christ. There is always new growth. It is interesting that Christ against the backdrop of a dark tomb. I am sure that his brilliance would have overflowed everything. How would I know? I wasn't there. I just have the Christ of Revelation 1 to compare. Does man have to put in darkness in comparison. Perhaps?
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Review of Starlights  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of a newbies newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: You do have the kiss of a romantic. I think we have all walked on stardust at one point or another.

Grammatical and spelling errors It seems like some pauses (commas) are left out. It makes it a little harder to read.

What I liked?*Smile*You didn't tell us what you felt. You showed us with imagery. They were pretty effective

What I disliked*Idea* It is hard to say anything new about romance. We wander in our imaginations that is a universe unto itself. Define universe. Define yourself. Say something new. Pretty tall order for such a well-trodden path

How the piece made me feel Is love mindblowing? Is it mindblowing for eternity? The poets would say yes. I am not sure. There are peaks and valleys

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Iron and Ore  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this on my computer as interesting. I did remember them and rode them as a child. They are Americana of a different age

Overall impression of piece Images are evocative like I really was there with you

Grammatical and spelling errors: Read well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* Images are often tactile. I can see them and feel them. I put all kind of junk in my pockets. An archeologist would have been proud

What I disliked*Idea* I am kind of lost in the sense of time. I barely remember some of this yet, I am much older than you

How the piece made me feel Do things ever truly go away? We still have tracks that did mass transit in our town back in 1915. Now we consider it a modern idea. With renovation, they could run over the same tracks. Trains are kind of dead in our day and age.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I have heard about the epidemic, especially in Ohio. This kind of literally puts a face to it. There is always a human component

Overall impression of piece: Succinct, but tells the story with still a lot of details.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Multimillionaire one word

What I liked?*Smile* There is a lot of impact to this. You obviously knew about this first hand and lived through the tragedy. We think of it as "America's problem" but those folks have a name and a tragic story

What I disliked*Idea* You may be right about Trump. I would need more specifics. He is not a business as usual kind of guy

How the piece made me feel What makes us happy? Obviously a million was not the answer. Is it just a missing face? There must be more meaning than this. I guess this leaves a trail behind that is hard to put into words, but perhaps there is still more to say

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC.

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty interesting. It is certainly a unique view

Grammatical and spelling errors I should all be capitalized or not. I have leeway for poets. Can't is missing an appostrophe.

What I liked?*Smile* This has unique images for a relationship. They are fragile, like a bubble. We as individuals kind of get wrapped up in them. Your images are kind of visceral. Not only can I see them; I can feel what they are like. They are sensual, without being over the top. There is a lot of lyrics about bubbles in old music--like tiny bubbles and of course, Lawrence Welk.

What I disliked*Idea* Maybe bubbles are interactive? Every bubble is different.

How the piece made me feel Tell us more about yourself in your port. Everybody is an aspiring author (or a masochist. We are changed by our bubbles. That is very right on.

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