How I have searched the listings for poems of this high quality and for similar content. I immediately called my wife to read it to her. I told her it was a long sought nugget of literature which I can relate to. I really enjoy trying to come up with adequate praise for work such as I class this piece.
In the audible reading of it I noticeably choke with emotion. Not being highly educated I cannot give advice as to improvements in a literal sense but for my part otherwise it requires that I express appreciation somehow. I will award you the max. Jimwithpen
To write for a group which may be much younger is an art that requires a heart which must be much bigger. This also qualifies for an attention holder for that size audience when they get those inevitable 'ants in their pants'. I have a niece whose work is in that same field. She would like to hear the short poems you write. If it is OK with you I will adivse her of this site and your work. She lives in Michigan. Meanwhile --- Don't hesitate to produce more of these beautiful poems for future citizens. Jimwithpen
You have written a beautiful summary of your understanding of the scripture mentioned. It serves multiple purposes too. One of the first to come to my mind is to double check the chapter and verse. It is good for those like-minded to get an understanding of the setting by reading enough to know it is not out of context. I must give you a few GPs for both reasons. Hold fast to your faith. Jimwithpen
I have tried to write short stories but with no success outside true happenings of my childhood. This seems to have the quality of a true experience. With that in mind it take on a load of emotion due to the natural sympathy of folks for children. Maybe that is the intent of this story. Either way, it turned out to be a very touching account of life. I can gather another facet of feelings about it from having been slightly intraverted as a youngster. I am going to give points for your efforts. Jimwithpen
Very beautifully written and very touching. It has to be by a person who has love in his heart for the Savior and will express it to others with no reservations. I too write with those inspirations. The simplicity of the message in such concise form makes it take on a quality many search for. I want to express my true appreciation for that quality with a few GPs.
Jimwithpen
Hello, this is Jimwithpen back again. I just love this one. I thought I would scan through your list and find one with a good sounding title and it turned out to be as gloriously wonderful as the other two i made comments on. It am beginning to see there is a chance that we could be friends due to the way I read and enjoy your work. I must send more GPs to seal the statement that I appreciate it so much. I can imagine children listening to such beautiful poems. Once again--- Jimwithpen
To read this one makes me twinge with jealousy. It is the subject and style of my preference. Beautifully written so as to make a reader feel that he is walking the path himself. I cannot say as a professor things about the construction, for my lack of education. But as a fan and newcomer to this site I will say in my best estimation, it fills requirements fo good form. I am so glad I chose it to read. I will try to catch any other work you post. I know not all of ones work is in the same category but I suspect yours will have quality. In my humble opinion you have maxed the test with this poem.
Jimwithpen, thank you again.
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