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I give a honest review, I look for improvements maintaining a good rhythm through the narrative. I value clarity in a storyline. I notice when pacing is off balance from one point in the story then the other. I like to focus on Grammer and punctuation as well. I like to give the author a good "WOW" from my review.
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Poetry, comendy, erotica
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Review of Will It Be  
Review by Kevster
Rated: E | (3.5)
Chapter One delves into the complexities of identity, self-betrayal, and the uncertainty of fate. The author explores the protagonist's struggle to understand herself amid the challenges and responsibilities of life. The narrative hints at the anticipation of a new identity while questioning the stability of current connections. The vivid imagery of nature, wind, and love adds depth to the emotions conveyed. The passage suggests a yearning for a lasting connection and a shared future, weaving a poignant tale of self-discovery and the complexities of relationships.

consider providing more specific details about the protagonist's internal struggles, perhaps delving into past experiences that contribute to her sense of self-betrayal. Adding clarity to the dynamics of the connections mentioned and expressing the protagonist's emotions more explicitly could deepen the reader's engagement. Additionally, weaving a clearer narrative thread that connects the themes of identity, fate, and relationships throughout the passage would contribute to a more cohesive storytelling experience. Lastly, refining the language to ensure a smooth flow and coherence would elevate the overall impact of the narrative.


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Review by Kevster
Rated: E | (5.0)
This passage vividly captures the complex dance between the speaker and the sea. The imagery is powerful, symbolizing a profound connection and the inevitable flow of life's currents. The use of sensory details creates an immersive experience, and the emotional undertones resonate with themes of longing and separation.
Honestly this hits me in a personal intimate level.


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Review by Kevster
Rated: E | (5.0)
Honestly "The Silent Goodbye" hits me on a very personal level. it is this super deep story about a couple, Sarah and Alex, going through a tough time. The vibe is heavy with emotions, and you can practically feel the room getting smaller as they try to talk about their relationship issues.

It's like a rollercoaster of feelings.. from the good times fading away to the tough decision of calling it quits. Sarah's bravery to say what needed to be said hits you in the feels, and Alex dealing with it is pretty real too.

The morning after, when they go their separate ways, is kinda heartbreaking. You can almost see the tears and feel the uncertainty about what comes next. But, hey, Sarah decides to walk away with her head held high, and that's pretty awesome.

The story's got this cool vibe of finding peace in the quiet moments after the storm. The whole "Silent Goodbye" thing is a big mood – like, saying what needs to be said and then finding freedom in the silence.

Overall, it's like a real look at love getting messy, and even though it's sad, there's this hope for something new at the end. It's a solid read if you're into feeling all the feels.


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