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Review of Stone Mason  
Review by Michelle
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I really liked the story and look forward to reading the second part of it. I'm send my suggestions etc. by attachment just becausse it was easier that way not because they were bad or anything like that. You'll see when you get it.
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Review of Desert Sands  
Review by Michelle
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I really like the story and I have only a few grammatical suggestions--In paragraph 1: ...on my left. In (delete the)back of me...

In paragraph 2: May I suggest you use another adj beside a second open to describe the sand (such as harsh or windswept)...and it was windswept sand.

Again in paragraph 2:...major rancher, set on (delete which was)

In paragraph 3:...off the back of (not off) his pony

and finally in paragraph 7: ...that knife in me (add--that he) never paid attention...
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Review of Waking Up  
Review by Michelle
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Wonderful story. There were a couple of run-on sentences, but otherwise a very engaging and entertaining story. Thank you.
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Review by Michelle
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
You have done a fantastic job on revising. I can't wait to read the rest of it.
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Review of Stuck in Life  
Review by Michelle
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I liked the story. There were some misspellings and a problem with maintaining tense between past and present, but otherwise it was good. Keep writing.
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Review of Crazy?  
Review by Michelle
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I've felt like this a lot of times myself. Maybe it's not that I'm crazy it's just that I'm my own person and I don't always fit into the general mold society wants to put every one into when it suits them. There's nothing wrong with being different and even a little "off" so to speak.
Michelle
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Review by Michelle
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very nice Vickie, but I'm not surprised.
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Review by Michelle
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was a very enjoyable story, thank you. Is that the end of the story or are you going to expand on it? It would be interesting to see it expanded.
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Review of Comment-In-A-Box  
Review by Michelle
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very informative thank you
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Review by Michelle
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Janelle this sounds like the beginning of a good story and I would like to hear more, but it does need soem work. I'd like to help you with it if you would like--my first suggestion would be to check and watch your spelling. If it's off the norm or wrong it can be very distracting to the reader--let me know if you'd like me to comment further. I'd love to see you continue to write and write and write. michelleAZ
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