interesting take on the deeds of others...well written and flows for such a strong voice of anger or is it frustration. my feeling is the bad characters usually suffer the most in the long run. nice job.
great symbolism and strong emotions and I loved the lines "The burns that scorched my skin felt like kisses on my cheek...the dividends of being Reborn can be great. very well done.
WOW! Simplicity that is so complex if that is possible. It is simple but says so much...life is the same as the leaf. As one who was told by a surgeon 6 years ago that I had a 15% chance of seeing the next day, I really love this poem.
Saw you in the campfire and thought I come do a review. The more I read this, the more I laughed, because I am sure I was in the same or a very similar snowstorm in DC. Mine started around rush hour and people were abandoning their cars in the middle of the beltway.
Anyway, I like seeing humor in what could be considered a minor tragic occurrence so A+ for subject matter and treatment of it. Obviously well structured and good form, rhyming not forced and fun to read
well expressed belief, flows nicely which is usually the trouble spot with free verse. while I don't completely agree with your point of view, I do understand it so I like that you express it without calling those who don't agree names - which is so often done these days and is a poor excuse for communication.
Like the opening chapters of a really good book. I could see all kinds of things coming...mystery, romance, thriller. Nice mixture of descriptive phrasing like "smelled of cinnamon and age," the simple but elegant wonderings about the od radio.
Would love to see this expanded. Let me know if you do.
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