That was a gripping read. I was pulled right into the story. Your description of body language was wonderfully done. The twist at the end, really hammered home a moral dilemma.
It was really well written and truly entertaining.
That was thought provoking. So often we make our lives so busy that we don't slow down enough to enjoy life and those we share it with. I've so often wished I could get out of the rat race and live a slower life.
I really enjoyed that story. Your language is very descriptive, esoecially when you were describing the dreamscape. I was pulled into the story easily, empathising with your character. The challenge you pose of not dismissing everything that out of the norm is something we should all do in all walks of life. An open mind leads to new experiences. although caution does need to be applied.
I enjoyed your story and you nicely portrayed Anna's struggle to remember who she was. Just a couple of comments as a reader. Maybe in the opening paragraph, you can articulate her fear of the hotel or that she knows the hotel. I got the impression she was uneasy because she was unsure of her relationship with Joe, but maybe it was both. Also, I got a little confused in the dialog in the woods start with. ‘You remember her. Don’t you.’ I wasn't sure who was speaking. Maybe add a voice tag to clarify, that's all.
Apart, from that, it flowed well and I enjoyed the concept. Great Job!
Excellent story and well told! I could hear two distinct voices, The main character's relaxed narration and then a separate crisper narration voice when he was writing the story.
I enjoyed the tension you created. The main character's fear was well described with all the senses making me feel the fear he rightfully felt.
Excellent story. Told well, with a good twist at the end. I felt as though I was in the sheriff's car watching the man drunkenly stumble around. Like the sheriff, I too was fooled.
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