Very good! This poem is beautiful. Some of it flows good but then their are a few parts that mess it up. And on line two it shouldn't be 'thats' it should be that's.
Rating: This deserves a four!
Overall impression: A good read!
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A very good piece! You write something that a lot of people can relate to. I think that at least once in their life most poeple feel like this, like they have something that they want to tell the world but they keep it trapped inside. It might look better if you centered it and took out the double spaces. With those little corrections I think that this poem could be a five!
Overall Impression: A good read!
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A very good piece! This poem flows well and sounds good to the ear. ! You have a nice poem but it could be better with some work. Maybe center it and italicize it! It also might look better if you put in some punctuation.
Rating: I will give this a five!
Overall Impression: A delightful read!
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Amazing! I have always been fascinated with these creatures, so I especially like this. You make them seem so majestic and free, almost like they are a god themselves. I especially like the line ' Navigates the world anolne, in the cosmos on its own'
Grammer Errors: I see none.
Rating: I will definetly give this a five!
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A very nice piece. Could be a little more descriptive though. I especially like the line "Like throwing pioson spears at dust motes in a sunbeam".{e:xmastree]
Grammer Errors: It might look a little better if you replaced a few of the commas with periods.
Rating: This deserves a five!
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A very good piece! It goes well and sounds good to the ear. You make me think that you don't want people to mourn for you but to rejoice. Not to cry and be sad but to laugh.
Grammer Errors: I see none.
Rating: This so deserves a five.
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A very good poem. You show that there will always be the battle for the evil inside every one of us. It might look better if you took out the double spacing and centered it.
Grammer Erros: I see none.
Rating: This deserves a five.
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{c:dorangeThis title is so appropriate. You describe feeling unspeakable pain and wanting to run away from every problem and all the pain but having no where to run to.
Grammer Errors: I don't see any.
Overall Impression: A very good poem!
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Wow.... This is an amazing peice. Your use of words makes it captivating.
You sweep the reader into a world of centuries past and beautiful scenery all seen through the eyes of something that has seen everything.
Grammer Errors: I see none.
Rating: I would give this higher than a five if I could.
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Very Good! This title is perfect, it really portrays deep thoughts.
It flows smoothly and sounds good to the ear.
Grammer Errors: In lines two, nine, and ten you need two capitalize I.
Rating: This deserves a five!
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Oh, and welcome to wdc, I hope your enjoying yourself!
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You have a really good poem here, but here is some things that could could do to make it better.
You could center it and then italicize it, that always maks a poem better. You show in this piece that God can help things if you just have the courage to ask him.
Grammer Errors: In line eight you need to capitalize I.
Rating: I will definetly give this a four!
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You captivate the reader with a fascinating tale!
it's like he may be dead but you know he's there watching you, in the wind or on the water, but he's there.
I especially like that he loved the sea so much that he wanted to die doing what he loves.
Grammer Errors: I see none.
Rating: I think this deserves a five!
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Wow... This is awsome!
It goes well and flows smoothly.
You write very well! Keep up the great work!
Grammer Errors: I see nothing that needs correcting.
Rating: I will definetly give this a five!
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