I liked it so much ... the name is catchy because it's the name of one of my favourite movies!! :D
The first two lines are amazing
"If I ever crossed your mind, would you call,
or would it seem like I'm nothing at all?"
It took me in the mood of the poem instantly, I connected to your feelings.
I just have one problem , the ryhmes.. In the first stanza the ryhmes goes, AABC & the second goes, ABCC & the third goes, ABBB....etc
It would be better if you kept similarly...
To sum it up , I loved the way you show your emotion.
Remember its just what I think, You could disagree, I was just giving my opinion ... Hope you'd stay in touch :)
Oh My God , this is weird , its like you took all my feeling and just wrote them . this is a great poem , real deal.
ADORE:I know why you exist
But you friendship I want to resist
if sadness makes you this good of a poet then be sad and stay sad..KIDDING :D love it really .. KEEP IT UP & hope you'd feel better!!
I read this , it really seems intresting .. I will make some time to read the whole thing..I really like the names , and idea . and the fact that you had the idea from a game you played with your buddies is great .I like black rose she seems tough and knows how to cook !! pretty impressive!!
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