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187 Public Reviews Given
187 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I tend to say what I like about it and what I don't and check for grammar mistakes.
I'm good at...
Finding grammar mistakes. Giving my view of the work.
Favorite Genres
War related and travel.
Least Favorite Genres
Dark, Erotica
Favorite Item Types
Short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Poems.
I will not review...
Anything 18+ or above. Anything with or pertaining erotica.
Public Reviews
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Review of Number Ten  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (4.5)
Grammar: Knowing well, one chickens fate (put an apostrophe in chickens),
So, with his bare hands

He began chasing the hens

As they scattered around the pens. (Somewhere in here there needs to be a comma. Right now it seems like a "run on sentence"), Same for the bottom half of it.

I do like this poem. I thought it was very amusing. Other than that, I personally don't see anything else wrong with it. Happy writing!
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Review of Open World  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Grammar: JiImmy should be Jimmy; "Hey Jimmy why don't you go home to your mommy and cry about life" there should be a question mark at the end. He (should be lowercase);
Strongest Point(s): The strongest points of this to me were the emotion and storytelling aspects of it. With a few tweaks this would make for a really good story.
Weakest Point(s): The grammar aspect of it. I think with a little more proofreading it would be better. I also think that if you put the dialogue like:
"Mom did you ever try to make it work with you and dad?"
The mother replies " yeah, but your father wouldn't stop getting into trouble so they locked him up and it's been a while since i've seen him"
Sort of something like that.

I hope this helped! Write on!
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Review of Expecto Patronum!  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Amber says that was amazing and gorgeous and wonder and perfect x2
I'm fanning myself right now in admiration.......
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is absolutely wonderful...
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Review of Visual Poetry  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so beautiful... I'm crying right now! Happy 14th Anniversary!
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Review of I'm so scared!  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I don't know what else to say, except thank you for sharing this. *Smile*
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Review of House Cleaning  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hahaha, and I though I was OCD! *Laugh* Great story though!
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Review of Water to Drink  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hahahaha, so funny! *Laugh*
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Review of My big dream  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I know you said you wanted reviews, so I will try my best!

Grammar: You’ll have to walk home, you little brat. Do you hear me”, (needs a question mark after me.) There are a lot of punctuation mistakes. Please proofread this and you will probably find them. Remember to put the commas inside the quotation marks when you have dialog. That's all I can say about this portion of the review.

I liked the story overall. It was very upsetting to say the least. It was a bit repetitive in some parts, but if that's how it's supposed to be then I can't say anything about that.

I hope this helped at least a little bit. Overall just keep an eye on your punctuation. Great job and keep writing! *Smile*
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Review of The Beginning  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I'm not really sure how you like your reviews, but I will most definitely try!

Grammar: I knew if I did, I'd likely find myself in deep water and sinking fast. I don't know for sure, but I don't believe you need the comma after did.

What I liked: I like that you can share this with people.

What I didn't like: I can't say much with this since it is experience and I wasn't there so I wouldn't know.

What stood out the most to me: Was that for the most part, you were very clear in what you were saying and/or trying to say.

Great job and keep writing! *Smile*
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like your story, but I have an issue with the rating. I think it should be at least ASR if not 13+. Great job though and keep up the good work!
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked the music that went along with this and I think this contest will be very successful.
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey! I have a few questions for you. I'm trying to submit this crossword and for #8 and #10 this green exclamation point keeps coming up, but they're the right answers. #8: Abigail Haven and #10: eighth. Also, I've read your entire story (very good by the way) and I cannot figure out #1. Could you please tell me what it is or at least where to find it? I'm trying to complete this for the Addicts challenge. Thank you! :)
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, this is a beautiful poem! I can actually picture what's going on and I like that. Great work and keep writing! :)
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Review of Food for words  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hahaha. You most certainly have a way with words! Keep writing! *Laugh*
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Again I say, Amen to that! :)
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Review of American Way  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Amen to that! :)
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you!!!! :) I'm not exactly sure how to send gps to the forum, but I'm going to donate some.
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't know how in-depth of a review you want, but I'll do my best.

Grammar: "Go sit over there until the police come for you,” she ordered, pointing to an up-ended empty box.” I don't believe you need the comma after ordered. I think this was it of the grammar mistakes.

Plot: I wasn't sure if this was fiction or non-fiction, but either way it was well thought out and detailed. I really liked this story and I hope you write more like this one.
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't know how in-depth a review you are looking for, but I'll do my best.

Grammar: There was only one grammar mistake I found throughout the whole story. "At Thanksgiving. I helped her make memory books for the children." After Thanksgiving you need to put a comma instead of a period.

Plot: I had no problem with any of it. It was a very sweet and sad story. Great job!
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Review of End Of The Line  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this story, but I especially like the ending.
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Review of Torment  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow...I really don't know what to say about this. It was good, no doubt about that. But, it wasn't really clear as to what was happening. I was waiting for an explanation at the end of the story of to what it was talking about, but I didn't get one. Please don't think that I didn't like it because I did, I just don't really understand what was going on. Thank you for sharing this with me though!
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Review of War Colors  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful poem. You have shown us what we needed to see and told us what we needed to know. But, aside from all of that you have touched many hearts. I hope that one day I will be able to show this poem to my children and maybe they will get to understand how important this symbol is to us. I hope that made sense. I just couldn't begin to explain what this poem means to me. Thank you for writing this! :)
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Review of First Steps  
Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice poem. Yeah, I remember that I almost broke my ankles in them! :)
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Review by Kai Rajaniemi
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Your essay was well written and understandable. You covered the topics well and it was very interesting. Great work!
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