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Review of MY MOTHER'S MOUTH  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Your mother was a remarkable woman. She had the courage and fortitude to speak up for the rights of others and herself.


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Review of Priests  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I felt that this was deeply meant and written. It describes that people can find loving kindness and compassion when you least expect it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I liked how matter-of-fact you were when you spoke of your upcoming surgical bypass. It meant, to me, that you had faced the inevitable and was prepared for what came next. I also liked the caveat that you were already a practicing minister but could accept the love and grace from another christian sect.

Grammar
No errors noted.



Suggestions:
I see nothing that needs changed besides maybe using larger font for easier reading.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your work on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
That is much like "Live Life on Life's terms". I wouldn't be the person I am today if I hadn't faced and overcome the adversity. My Acceptance of situations that exist and changing my perspective on how I look at events in my life has made me stronger.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It is true that people have hidden value that they need to allow to become. We all have potential and acceptance of that is also crucial.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I suggest larger font size to make it easier to read.

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Review of Frowsy Hair  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
You got acrossed the idea that this gentleman needs a hair taming and the wind is making everything worse.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
You definitely hit the 24 mark. I like how you were able to complete an idea in only 24 syllables. That is a tricky seeming task.


Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
Perhaps a larger font to read more easily.


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Review of Grizz fan  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This struck me as a luxurious consumption of chocolate, but I am not sure where the 'bears' come from.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It was almost erotic hearing you describe the chocolate. LOL

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
No changes needed.

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Review of Goodbye!  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

Very amusing poem. LOL You weren't REALLY interested in ending that relationship were you?

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I've never seen so many ways to say good bye before. Very entertaining.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
No suggestions except a larger font for easier reading.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Congratulations on finding our site. I hope you are happy here.


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Review of Fishful Thinking  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I can't say I can easily find emotion with a stuffed singing fish.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I understand what you are trying to do, but this is not, strictly, a correctly syllabled limerick.
A-A-B-B-A is the Rhythm. The 'A's need to be the same syllables and the 'B's are supposed to have the same syllables, also.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
Double check the syllables before you post for a better impression on your readers.


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Review of TEN LITTLE WORDS  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very strong message of inner strength and fortitude. It hit me that this is going to be a journey shortly forth-coming to me and my own mother.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
You demonstated your mother's resilience and strength of character, with her and in you.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
It is well written and needs no changing except to maybe use a larger font size for easier reading.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Now this really hit me. I totally did not expect the ending. But, thinking the matter over, I can understand why it would happen. Terrible to have a culture value women lower than the most common filthy dog.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This is a perspective I've never thought about before. Troubling.

Grammar
I noticed the tense of your words changed in the middle of the poem.
"to know" "Will be"
you changed it to the tense "She IS beat" not she will be beat.


Suggestions:

I see no need for any changes except cosmetic larger font size for easier reading.


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Review of Washing Dishes  
Review by Sherasi
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I really liked reading this because doing 'homey' things gives your mind time to rest and relax. It also give you a sense of accomplishment for doing something well.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
It liked the way you matter-of-factly put down the sequence you use to do household chores. It has a solid calming feel.

Grammar
No errors noted


Suggestions:
I would use a larger font for easier reading, otherwise the poem stands alone.

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Review of Insomnia  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This is totally heartfelt and I understand completely. I have a sleeping disorder and Sleep Apnea.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
Your rhyming is well done and your word choice is very good. I like how you call upon the God of Death to request a 'little' sleep.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
If you are having troubles sleeping, it might be a good idea to monitor when you stop drinking caffiene in the evening, to stop eating/snacking at about 7pm, make a good routine and stick to it... perhaps a cup of hot sleepy tea, followed by a hot soaking bath. No electronics such as phones or televisions to be used after 7pm.. this keeps your brain too active. If nothing helps, I found out I have Sleep Apnea and require a C-PAP during my night sleep, perhaps you should test for that as well.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very nice read. I like the rhyming, for the most part it didn't sound forced. Each grouping had it own main idea which is a good quality to read.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
The tone reads somber with a subtle hint of hope and renewal of Spring.

Grammar
Some of the stanza's seem a bit irregular, slipping words onto the next sentence to 'get' the rhyme. Example:

"‘Gainst voracious winter’s
Attack. Ground petrifies, weakens,
Wood tears, branches splinter."

The 'winters attack' forces a rhyme that isn't ready to be rhymed yet, if that makes sense.


Suggestions:

I would suggest a different phrase rather than push the rhyme through.
perhaps:

"attack against the voracious winters
ground petrifies, weakens,
wood tears, branches splinter."

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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Oh you evil woman!! chocolate! My one besetting sin! It is clear you have as intimate a relationship with it as I do! This was a lovely read.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like how you repeated the word chocolate to lay emphasis in its importance in your life.

Grammar
no errors noted


Suggestions:
I like how you spaced apart the various chocolate themes, but the font could be a bit larger.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Nika, you are most welcome to spend time here writing and getting and giving reviews. I am a newby, too. I am pleased you figured out what you wanted to do at such a young age. Gives you lots of time to learn and grow into your own style of writing.


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Review of Mid-August Dawn  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
The dawn approaches on cat-light feet.. and creeping as quietly. I really like the sky impression with your words.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I love the short extremely packed imagery here.. you use sound, visual and tactile senses in this work.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
Use of a larger font would be nice.

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Review of Change Your Mind  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very enjoyable read. I like the common theme of making a decision just to have it changed as you grew up. I like how your poem follows your growth and development into a fine woman.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"stumbling blocks oft made into stepping stones"... very good imagery, good advice, too.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
I suggest you use a larger font, but the work stands alone.


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Review of Pyromania  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This is a very volatile piece of writing, love as a crime to return to again and again.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
"Burning embrace, ignited my heart, reduced me to ash". Lovely imagery.

Grammar
no errors noted.


Suggestions:
I suggest a larger font, the poetry was lovely.


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Review of THE CLIFF  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Welcome to writing.com. I am glad to have a chance to respond to your words.

When I read this I feel you are making your way along an uncertain path, through various elements of nature. It is a bit anxiety inducing to be walking along a path of unknown circumstances toward a cliff that you will, inevitably, fall from.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I enjoyed the whimsical tone in your work.



Grammar
I liked how you spaced out the lines.


Suggestions:
No suggestions at this time.


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I am reading that you are fed-up with the trite, shallow conversation that most people latch on to.
I do understand this but one explanation may be it is 'safer' that way. They don't have to commit to more than they can handle.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I like how you describe your anxiety as a positive aspect of your personality. I, too, have wondered how to find people who can have deep meaningful interaction with me. I, too, have felt I was 'put up with' instead of valued for my own self and good qualities.

Grammar
No errors noted.


Suggestions:
Keep writing on here, and you will have valuable insight and responses to your words. I have found that to be so.

Thank you for sharing your words with us. Write On! Keep coming back.

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Review of FORTY-EIGHT YEARS  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a very interesting read. I am reminded of the VOices in my Head who won't let me alone. Sometimes, I have to bargain with what I can't block.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I really enjoyed your poem, how it was written and rhymed. It is a good explanation for those who may have mental illness, if I might be so bold.

Grammar
No errors


Suggestions:
The poem was masterful, have you considered re-evaluating your treatment plan?


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Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a hopeful, eager, and positive story. She is going to grab life by the horns and do what needs doing. Very nice.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This journey is a going to be a terrific change in her life, and you said it well. It makes me want to hear what happens next.


Grammar
Some small typing errors noted, just look over the text backwards and you'll find any errors.



Suggestions:
There is nothing I need to suggest.


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Review of Mountain Love  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I hear a gleeful note, here. A love of the outdoors.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
Even with so few words, you bring out a lot of impact.

Grammar
No problems noted.


Suggestions:
Keep writing, LOL


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Review of Stigma  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I get the impression that there is effort being put into obtaining grants money but that it is a tedious exacting activity.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I LIKE this.. short sweet and to the point. I like the rhyming it worked well.

Grammar
No problems noted.


Suggestions:


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Review of Why Read?  
Review by Sherasi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your poem on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a pleasure to read.. I too have had all those adventures and more! It is exciting to read of these far off places and times and people.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:
To this day, I read voraciously. I've also learned from their mistakes (sometimes reinforced by my OWN).

Grammar
No problems noted.


Suggestions:
I liked how you spaced out the lines, made for easier reading!


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