THE PLOT

A lament of a lover. A beautiful story poem that touches the heart of the reader. The end left me in tears.
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

It is basically a free verse. The words provide easy and smooth reading. beautiful imagery.
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked the story and its presentation. Slowly it fulls the reader with grief and leaves him/her in a drift even after the reading is completed. It reaches to the heart of course.
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SUGGESTIONS

All spelling suggestions are in red and suggestions for punctuations are in blue.
A couple of places you have used four periods. I am not quite sure that they exist as a literary pattern just check with them.
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OVERALL IMPRESSION

A beautiful poem, a must read.
Port raid on...
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THE PLOT

A poem that talks bout the various breeds of people we can sue for their indecent behaviour
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

Basically it is a free verse and a post modernist form of poetry. The words are presented very nicely and flow around smoothly...
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked the number of people you listed on the list. Only if I could really sue these guys...
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SUGGESTIONS

Sorry .. Nothing to write in here

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OVERALL IMPRESSION

Good One...
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THE PLOT

An angel who inspires the author to live... His life is held by that angel...
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

The lines do not follow a particular rhyme schem. The words flow bout very smoothly. Beautifully expressed in subtle words.
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked the form of your angel. Truely angels are everywhere around us in al forms only we miss the sight that beholds such beauty.
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SUGGESTIONS

Enhance your presentation with a picture and colored fonts. Wil luk gud!
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OVERALL IMPRESSION

A beautiful poem... Dedicated to the author's wife...
WELCOME TO WRITING.COM!
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THE PLOT

A lover who finds reflections of his lover in the sundry elements of nature.
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

With repetition used for emphasis, this poem follows no particular meter.
The color scheme used enhances the author's notion.
It is a concrete free verse.
No mechanical errors found.
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked the picture that accompanies the poem. I must say kenz , your aesthetic sense is great. Keep going.
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SUGGESTIONS

None from a newbie like me

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OVERALL IMPRESSION

A beautiful poem with vivid and alluring description. Great work Kenz...
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THE PLOT

A poem that gracefully personifies nature and shows the author is allured by the bewitching beauty nature manifests.
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

An original poem in the style of Walt Whitman. Here repetition of certain words with which the lines start is used to create an impact. It links the Threads to gether and yet keeps them separate. No particular meter is abided to. The poem is writen in the first person perspective. It uses personification of elements of nature.
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WHAT I LIKED

I just loved the words used for personification. They sound so charismatic and captivating. Good choice of words.
I also liked the coloring scheme used. makes each stanza more distinct.
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SUGGESTIONS

None...

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OVERALL IMPRESSION

A must read... Great personification used.
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THE PLOT

A request to autumn... The poem suggests the plot...
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

No particular Rhyme scheme is seen as such. No meter is found
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked the pic used... Beautiful I must say... Got it from the net?

And then most of all I liked the presentation of the poem


The poem uses just the appropriate colors to go with the description. Especially the change in font color for description of the first line of three stanzas that describe autumn and the first line of last stanza that describes winter, is noticeable and worth appreciation. Also the yellow and brown leaves was a good Idea...
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SUGGESTIONS

None...

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OVERALL IMPRESSION

The presentation of the poem was great! The pic used also deserves some appreciation... Good work...
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THE THEME

An autobiographical account wherein the author describes his love for summer... (I'll put it this way...)
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Errors if any

I found no mechanical errors with grammar/ spelling.
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked the way you have out ur feeling in words. True to yourself and just expressed. i also liked the pic u have used.
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SUGGESTIONS

Someday, with kids go out and enjoy throwing snowballs. Make a snowman or ride the sledge. You'll just luv wwinter for what it is...

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OVERALL IMPRESSION

Good work. The font reminds me of winter all the while. Hmmm , u might have expected me to deduct that half a point but you earn half more for the pic. So its 5
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THE PLOT

The author awaits spring and watches an appreciates even the smallest signs of it...
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

Basically a free verse arranged in duplets. The repetition used creates an effect. The only rhyming words used are in the last two lines which add to the beauty of the poem. the last line is isolated and hence focused on. The presentation is good and helps us read the poem as the author wants us to.
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked the words you have used and as the poem is writen out as a personal thought, I must say you are a good observer.
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SUGGESTIONS

None...

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OVERALL IMPRESSION

The poem is one with hope... Hope for the better to come up... But sorry for the half star I deducted... Its just that I like winter....
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THE PLOT

It speaks bout all that the poet has to offer his lady... Well dear chris, read this poem to the girl you like and she will neva turn you down.. Good work...
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

A rhyme scheme of aabbcc... is followed for most of the lines. A particular meter is not abided by.
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked all the choices that the author has put forth and also all that he has to offer...
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SUGGESTIONS

I think you should do some work with the punctuation. It wil help us to read better.

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OVERALL IMPRESSION

A good one... and would definitely impress any gal... Only if my BF cud write such poems...
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THE PLOT

A haiku that talks bout the first rays of morn..
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RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

A hakiu follows the 5-7-5 syllable scheme for three lines. It is a popular form of poetry origining from Japan.
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WHAT I LIKED

I liked the Haiku. THere is not much in a haiku but i must say that i liked the coloring scheme u have out forth.
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SUGGESTIONS

None..

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OVERALL IMPRESSION

Gud one and the syllable scheme is exact..
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THE PLOT

The poem has been writen for a contest. It speaks about a fairy who is troubled at heart.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

No particular rhyme scheme or adherence to any meter.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the way you described the agony of the fairy. I especially liked the lines


"I will never sleep
With captive spirit,"

SUGGESTIONS

None...

OVERALL IMPRESSION
A beautiful poem, deserving praise...

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THE PLOT

An ode to the writer herself

RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

Though the stanzas dont follow a particular rhyme scheme, the words that rhyme create a mellifluous effect. No meter is adhered to.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the description bout the poetess. When told to write bout oneself, many people show negative attitude. I liked the positive approach of the writer.

SUGGESTIONS

Hey I think you should include your picture with the poem. Just to add to the effect... and also for us to know you better (e:smile}

OVERALL IMPRESSION

WELL DONE!

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THE PLOT

The title suggests the plot. The poem is dedicated to the poetess' piano, one she has grown up with.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

No particular rhyme scheme is found but the rhythm is well maintained with a few rhyming words and the presentation helps us to read better.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the poem. Especially, I liked the piano relieving the poetess from her pains and anguish. Music truely has its own effects...

SUGGESTIONS

I have none...

OVERALL IMPRESSION

A beautiful ode and a perfect dedication. I think you have out enough human values in your piano and I think that your piano must have definitely liked your poem...

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THE PLOT

A reflection over life with a spiritual point of view.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

A tritina.
Here is the description
* Written as a tritina in pentameter

* The Tritina is a ten- lined poem, divided over three tercets and a single line. The end words of the three lines in the first tercet are repeated as per the following scheme:

A/B/C
C/A/B
B/C/A

A,B,C

Iambic pentameter is found in most of lines.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the strict adherence to the form of a tritina. The pentameter is also exact and the words flow smoothly. They do not sound forced. the theme selected is also beautiful.

SUGGESTIONS

Nothing to go here.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

The poem strictly follows the pentameter and hence sounds beautiful from a professional point of view.

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MERRY XMAS

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THE PLOT

Another christmas poetry or rather tritina... Describing the various hues of the christmas sky...

RHYME, RHYTHM AND METER

The tritina follows a rhyme scheme of abc, cab, bca for the three tercets and in the last singlet internal whyme scheme is abc. It is a sestina. you wont find rhyming words but the words themselves are repeated.


WHAT I LIKED

The description of the christmas sky is beautiful. And it seems to be a form of concrete verse.

SUGGESTIONS

Well if you want to call it a tritina, then a tritina also requires the lines to be in a particular meter that is either a pentameter or a tetrameter. Some of your lines do not fit in these two.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Gud job. Just look thru the meter!!!

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MERRY XMAS

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THE PLOT

CHRISTMAS BREEZE IS IN THE AIR...
THE FRAGRANCE CARRIED CARRESSES OUR SOULS...
WE AWAIT THE BIRTH OF A SAVIOUR...
AS THE CLOCK STRIKES TWELVE THE WORLD SLEEPS WHILE WE CELEBRATE3 THE BIRTH OF CHRIST...OUR SAVANT...

Hmmm the poem sounds to be writen on the occasion of Christmas and carries a value with it.
It asks the masses to convert themselves to true christians this christmas...

THE RHYME, RHYTHM AND METRE

No adherence to particular rhyme scheme as such. Not writen in any paritcular metrical form. The words just rhyme randomly and create some effect to add to the flow of the poem.

WHAT I LIKED

WHAT I LIKED THE MOST IS THE MESSAGE THAT THE POEM CONVEYS.
It asks the people to convert their home into churches and more so it asks the parents to inspire their children to lead the life of a true christian. In simple words, the poem also inspires each one of us to work for the welfare of those troubled, around us.

SUGGESTIONS

I dont know why but just as I read thru the last stanza i felt it would sound more beautiful as

He died on the cross
to cleanse man from sin
What greater gift could He
have given us, His kin.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Just the perfect poem to be read out at the gatherings for Xmas celebrations...

ANd hey King once again Thanks for the GPs...
They will help me to buy the upgrade... I am really working on GPs. Cant afford paid membership... but cant live without writing.com and so GPs are my savant for the while
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THE CENTRAL THEME

The writer talks about "labels" that we give out to people or situations or feelings,etc. The writer describes them through narrating her personal experiences.
The essay is written in the first person perspective.

WHAT I LIKED

I really liked the way the author has presented the essay. It looks like she is holding a conversation. The questions asked, the irony used, all give us a feel of a face-to-face conversation with the writer, where we listen like a passive listener trying to get the max out of it.

THE PERSONAL EXPERIENCES MENTIONED

I have always said "Reality finds itself presented better on paper than fiction".

By narrating her own personal experiences, the writer has helped us to relate to the essay. Her experiences sets the reader's mind thinking bout similar situations that he/she might have faced. It gives a feel to the essay and adds in just that extra little bit that makes it stand out from other essays.

SOME SUGGESTIONS

Not a suggestion I would call it. It is something to do with punctuationa and I am weak at it too.
Yet while I read the line
"Those members of my family that it happened to kept quiet, pretending it didn't happen."

I feel that a comma after "it happened to" would help the reader read and comprehend the matter easily.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

The essay reflects well the social issues of "labeling" and leaves the reader thinking, with the questions that form the conclusion

GUD WORK
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